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Honoured yet again
You make my photos speak volumes.. thank you so much for this honour you pay me.
Works as a whole.
The visual layout of the poem adds to its content beautifully and is very appealing. My only criticism is 'heavy metal vehicles' feels a little cumbersome for such a delicate poem. Just a thought.
Otherwise, lovely poem and congrats to the photographer.
b'brig
both of you
good job. :)
Good.
Nicely describes and illustrates the travels towards unknown destinations.
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My comment is slightly nervous having admitted last week to being perceptively challenged by illustrated work. However as WSO also said last week in another context she sought criticism.
I suggest that the role of the picture might me greater and more interesting with a few words omitted .These are 'each night' 'vehicles' 'car' 'travelling' 'driving' 'travelling' (again).Notwithstanding that,good work.
Clever...
...the spacing of the words has the feeling of traffic weaving in and out. Well worth reading. Kudos to both!
Tess
Exquisite.
A lovely nocturnal photo that assists immeasurably in telling the story. This rendering had an interesting format.
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These creatures of the day, for what do they search at night? Or have they found it and are now going to their burrows to slumber - eventually?
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These creatures of the day, for what do they search at night? Or have they found it and are now going to their burrows to slumber - eventually?
THIS ANIMAL
called TRAFFIC. TK U MLJ LV NV
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