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Could this BE anymore boring?
I stopped reading this after chapter 6 because every chapter was exactly the same: "She fucks Jake, feels guilty, intends to end it". Since a number of other chapters have been posted I thought I would see if anything has changed. Yes, it has! "She fucks Jake, feels guilty about HER DAUGHTERS, intends to end it".
maybe after a few more chapters
So after 14 chapters we still or now know she feels guilty. so when dose thies end.
maybe after a few more chapters
So after 14 chapters we still or now know she feels guilty. so when dose thies end.
maybe after a few more chapters
So after 14 chapters we still or now know she feels guilty. so when dose thies end.
maybe after a few more chapters
So after 14 chapters we still or now know she feels guilty. so when dose this end.
how do writers get away with this crap
serial cliffhangers of bullshit,over and over about nothing.give us reader a break.get to the point please.
lol as some one else said
when will this bull shit ever end ...its all the same she fucks her hubby boss and feels guilty and says it must end... ill be surprised if im alive when it does at this rate...make it nice now throw in 14 chapters of hubbys revenge....make it bad and make it last ..do something except this endless drivel
More shit
More of the same old shit. 'I'm such a slut. I must do whatever Jake tells me. Golly, I sure hope Jake does not make me go to a halfway house and fuck 50 released prisoners with aids. I will have to do it or he will tell Monty. I love Monty but I must be forever Jake's. but sometimes I like to be in charge. i know what I'll do to stretch my pussy for Jake the next time. I will stick the bedlamp up my ass and wear it to our next meeting but I have to be careful or Monty will notice what I've been up to with a stretched pussy and asshole. I'll let Monty fuck me in the left ear and maybe in my right nostril."
Stupid fucking shit with still no end in sight. Three chapters and 9 weeks of the same day's fuckee suckee bullshit. Just as you think it can't get any more fucking dumb, it does. The schoolbus delivers your kids and you run to the shower and don't hide your fucktoys. Just how fucking dumb is this stupid fucking woman, and the authoress too? Give the fucking reader a little bit of credit for being able to discern shit from truth.
Maybe the daughters will have the guts
to tell Dad about their mother's "habits". The only reason I can see for you to continue with the "same scenario" in every chapter is to see how much of a low score you will get for each chapter. The readers pretty much know the score: wife cheats, feels a tiny (and getting smaller ever time) bit of guilt for her actions and then she worrys that someone will find out. Do us a favor and when you get to the final chapter, write "The end" in the comments section with the title.
Stop bashing
To the poster that said 'I stop reading after chapter 6' aren't you a bit mental? If you have stop at 6 why are you at 14? Just to keep on bashing someone for the fun of it?
Story line may not be there but hey! It's fantasy. There are more stories on this site that were equally crap but people supported it.
Try lessening to the readers!
OK I got it! Your favorite themes are degradation and humiliation of women; women who love to hate and degrade themselves and lies and deception as the main guiding maxim in family life. To each his own. If that was the problem with what you write I would have suggested the Horror section. No big dill. But it would not work. The Horror section is for stories, and this is a story site. Yours is a non-story. A story - among other qualities, includes a beginning middle and most importantly - an end. Usually, It has characters, which develop and a plot i.e. something that happens – as in development not as in bodily functions only. You have to incorporate at least some of these qualities in order to morph your writings into stories!
Another suggestion. Why not take the approach of lessening to the reader’s feedback and use it as an opportunity to learn!
JUST POPPED IN FROM CHAPTER 5
SAME SHIT, SAME TIME. SEE YOU NEXT YEAR....GARRRRBAGGE.
Enough
I think enough is a enough and she should finally get a STD
Glory????
By now you know most of us feel this is just a poorly written sick accident traveling to nowhereville but I'm guessing you can still embarass yourself further. In fact, I'm sure but wonder when it will sink in?
It has been apparent for some time, that this sick aberrant repetition excites no one else but you author! Of concern in this deviant display is just how bad off are you in your own mind? [bottle, pain, humiliation, children] Unlike your story, we hope that there are no underage one's about when you finally lose it.
Sincerely, get some help for this habitual and deepening problem before it gets much worse and you can't handle it.
Continue, please !!!
I simply couldn't believe what used to be written in other comments. Story is perfect. Balance between shame and willing participation is well catched. If one is happy to read only about silicone bimbos allways willing for sex - well site is huge - help yourself. Lorri, please continue. Only problem is currently, a little bit slow pace in chapter delivering.
A Clue
I think lorri4u gave us all a clue to the length of this tale in the very first chapter on the length of it.
Remember in the very first chapter when she said she met Jake two years ago? Well fourteen chapters have been presented to the reader in a couple of months and a story time frame of about three weeks or so.
This will last a long long time ladies and gents with nothing notably happening. Monty leaves. She fucks Jake a few days while he is gone, almost gets caught by her kids each time. Monty comes home, stays a day or two. She reluctuctantly gives him one or so pieces of ass or sucks his cock. Goes back to Jake at first opportunity, and the saga continues.
This broad is so fucking stupid that she leaves her fucktoys on the bed so she can wash off and maybe take a douche her day's activities. I guess she figures that her daughters wil inspect her ass and cunt to see if there is tell tale cum running out of her upon arriving at home. They would never come by her room and notice her fucktoys on her bed. No, that would never happen. They would rush right to her side and say "Gosh Mom, let us see your ass and pussy. Is that Cum running out of You? Golly mom, how could you do this? You know that we like to look up your dress and in your panties and into your cunt and ass to see if there has been fresh semen in them as soon as we get home from school."
In this time frame I figure that she has gotten three weeks into her two year time frame of being with Jake. At a new chapter pace every three weeks or a month, she's got about 7-8 years left to tell the tale of her and Jake.
I'll bet the Bush and Christian Fundamentalists running the government shut the fucking internet porn sites down before Lorri finishes this "reluctant Non consenual" tale .
Oh well, if you miss a chapter or several for that matter, it is like As The World Turns. you can come back in a couple of years, read the latest chapter, and never miss over a week or so in lorri's and Jake's story.
FC
pussy stretching
Have him stretch her pussy always-a dailt exercise cos it is so damn hot!
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