All Comments on 'Visit of the Apprentice Pt. 04'

How could there be no Energon goodie?

. . . but it helps perpetuate the urban myth of orgasmic female ejaculation.

why do you keep skipping the sex scenes? good story but nobody comes to this site for "fade to black.... 25 minutes later"

you spent 3 chapters building up to that lol

I have read your comments and I have taken them to heart, however one of the reasons that I don't just write stright up sex is that A. after a while it get repetative, and B. I might not like what you like, at which point the scene would be lost on you. This way you get to fill in the blanks. I stick to what I am good at.

Having said that I have started to add in more scenes to the stories that i am writing.. however those stories won't show up for quite some time.. this is my 25th story part.. I just finished writing Story part 38. this covers various different stories not just this story. So it will take time.

I am so pleased you got the reference :)

well it is fiction after all :P

So several chapters in and the basis for the story is still unclear. I feel like I don’t even have to read the story at all. I only have to read the 5 line email intro and skip the 10 hours earlier waffle that leads nowhere and gives no new plot info and is as PG as it comes.

So I think that this story SHOULD NOT be on Literotica it doesn’t fit the sire profile at all. Publish elsewhere.

1 Star for every chapter and I’m not even reading anymore.