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Deathships

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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone05/15/05

*

really good, liked it, some of the images are outstanding, some a little close to stock, nothing fatal

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by Anonymous05/15/05

Mentioned

in the sunday reviews
du lac~

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by Wanton Vixxxen05/16/05

"Deathships" came alive for Me...

as you effectively set the mood dark and somber; yet with the repetitive use of the two lines, you actually made the poem sway as if adrift on the seas. Really nice work on this one, K.

Vixxx

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by Jennifer C05/16/05

Good work

Really enjoyed this.
Thanks.
~ J

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by Anonymous05/02/12

Good poem.

I would like to see it edited without the constant repeat of "bare wooden...". I think it would make more of a statement if it were slightly condensed.

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