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small mistake here:
I once I sang to you this unwritten music
nice
Mistake?
'I once I sang to you this unwritten music'
It certainly looks like a mistake but the concrete sound of that line rings better with the mistake. Like a painter's dawb on a canvas, sometimes the mistake makes for an interesting resonance.
I like this poem.
b'brig
Every river has a song
Lovely poetry,
Thanks.
~ J
hmm
hmmm I just meant that I wrote the music, the lyrics were in a book and I made up the tune. I thought that was important because no one else could have sung it to him, it had to be my voice he heard
I was struggling how to put it down
I guess I could say music that had yet to be written
every way I tried it came out so bulky
thanks for the comments! I will work on that line a bit more
~Jennifer
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Minor errors. I got the drift.
I'm really enjoying your poetry. Keep up the good work.
I have to agree with b'brig on this one...
I, too, paused at that line thinking it was perhaps a type-o, but then reading it again, I feel it is the perfect flaw {if it ever WAS a mistake} and I would not change a thing. The meaning of the poem was flawless and that's all that ever matters to Me. Cherished motherly visions were felt by this another motherly woman and I thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece today, as
Mommy Vixxx
ha!
my brain did not even pick up the extra I, typo indeed, thanks for pointing it out
as
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Your poem has been mentioned in Monday's New Poems Reviews.
deja cool
I love a poetic series
where we going next MA'
I like Gun Powder river
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Excellent, as always!
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