by backwoodsman1952
on the cheating, it wasn't supposed to hurt anyone - but clearly MJ is hurt by it.
as for the hints of future health problems, they wouldn't be tobacco related?
as the whipping, some guys have an hard time giving pain. what surprises me is that he gets aroused by women getting whipped, i would think it would make him ill. odd, but people are odd so i guess it is possible.
your story you don't use a lot of descriptors, do you? i would think you might mention how it smelled, tasted in the barn with all that hay dust, and so on to get the setting. but it is still well written.
I look forward to more. I think You are doing a fine job on this. You might consider more detail but otherwise well done.
I've waited patiently for each chapter to be published and I haven't been disappointed. Ronnie W.
My wife and I have both read all of your chapters and look forward to more. My wife has always had a fantasy of being publically whipped. I too have trouble helping her, becuase the idea of hurting her makes me ill. When I do give her what she wants she is in ecstacy. For me, she is not a smoker but indulges my fetish by smoking occasionally when we are having sex. Your story touches several nerves for both of us, probably more common than we think. Thank you and please continue. Syd
I am open to discussion with you on this story. I think that given the possibility in the plot that Shirley may decide to get pregnant by you? That would lead to a lot more eroticism in my estimation.
I must say that there are a lot similiarities to your stories and that of my own personal fantasies. I did have this fanatasy much like your story of an older woman who smokes. That fantasy has become reality many times since, but many of the women were either not into it or questioned the fetish. It is nice to know after your story that I am not alone.The sexiness of the smoking in the fanatasy has led to a lifetime of actual and fantasy type of experiences with sexy smoking and women. My most recent girlfriend just last week-end fucked another guy and on my arrival home was in bed wearing a red teddy, smoking a long cigarette. She went on to tell me she is a nasty girl and really needed to smoke to prove that. Well I wanted you to know that a sexy part of your stories certainly is the sexy smoking of the lady and her daughter. Well Done
i have a hot memory of a woman with a huge bush of hair and a delightfully kinky attitude. after fucking each other eniough times to get familiar. we we relaxing each smoking. i told her her cunt...she liked me to use that word...was smoking hit. i moved between hedr legs, coverd her bush with my mouth and forced smoke into it. it took a few applications, finally trhe moist hairheld trhe smoke and it appeared to be smouldering. i yelled fir, ju,ped to my knees and poured pee over her bush and lips she screamed, burst oy laughing then comvulsed into one of the violent orgasms i have ever observed in a woman. this became an occasiuonal surpirse part of our routine. one night it filled her cunt hair with smoke as she was sleeping on her back, trhen woke her with the yell and pee. afterr sher came. she caught me by surprise and half drunk, locked her legs around my head and poured her golden liquid over my face and into my mouth. it was absolutely delicous.
I am a fan of women who are hairy and don't shave. They are a huge turn-on for me and I always get excited being close and my memories come back to the hirsute womwn I was intimate with. Oh to have someone now!(oscarwerner456@yahoo.com)
I think that the stories are well written, and seem to have also a good degree of realism. The two main characters are imperfect and nothing sounds too unrealistic. There are feelings too that come through from the writing. Well done!!
Teasing her was foreplay to rimming. She could even had let you poke her rectum. Probing women like that has driven a few women I have done to understand it is dirty fun.