All Comments on 'Opening Laurie'

Rather uneven story. What did his wife's disappearance have to do with the story?

... I agree with the first comment. Although it ended well, the beginning was a bit confusing. Like whatkind of shoes did Laurie wear the most? It would just take from the story, unless it was a foot fetish story. Keep witing and maybe think abouy using an editor.

Excellent, very hot, and I mean hot. I wish I'd read this story to m/b to. Made me hard tho. You write very well.

Rudy

You aren't a new author and should use spellcheck / editor to improve the result of your time & efforts.

What wife - went where how who cared - why have wife in story? You postured her to be a negative so you could have hubby fuck around justifiably - how sweet?

Puzzling eh!

Very erotic inasmuch as you broke Laurie's cherry barebacked and without concern for any type of possible pregnancy?

100% believable, 100% good story.

100% believable, 100% good story.

0% believable. 100% a typical LW story. 0% worth the time to read.