by Stryderthorongil
'Beware the Phantom' appears too often - eight times. The whole piece would be strengthened greatly if this phrase only appeared perhaps 3 times - twice in the poem's body, than at the very end.
This is really interesting, but I must admit, I began to look at it in a writers' fashion. Someone mentioned about limiting, the phrase, "Beware the Phantom" I agree. Although, if formatting allowed, I would have made it italic? As if it were being whispered, which is how I repeated in my head. As if someone were on my shoulder, warning me. As a reader, I felt it was an intense poem and thought that in truth, there is a flip-side.. ~ Honey