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I could feel the pain and heartache coming through so intensely. Made me want to cry myself.

A meloncholic poem.

My only criticism is that I question whether, so and so "said" this and 'so and so "said" that is necessary. Said, seems to get in the way. I would leave the reader to figure out who was speaking. But maybe that is just me.

Just a thought.

b'brig

leaving behind an empty shell.

Like hers, yet I still breathe.

speaks volumes and great depths of the pain of loss...you did well in pulling the old heartstrings....llil/blue

How did you get past my wall?

<drip>

Tragically conveys how medical conditions are so often overlooked and how the treatments we rely on can fail us.

and still lingers there as I type this comment. I can't even imagine how you were able to express these tragic events, but I'm glad you were able to share them with us here today. God bless you and your loved one, Zanzibar. <hug>

Vixxx

and so very sad, a really

lovely deep piece of writing.

thanks.

~ J