by useme17
I like reading stories about fathers and daughters and it totally turned me on! I hope you will be doing more on this subject.(It made me very WET!)
Fun story. I love reading about slutty little daughters that beg daddy. The spanking and whipping of her tits and pussy was a nice touch but when you pissed in her mouth I jacked off just thinking about it.
I would hope you use an on line editor for your next submission. Keep up the good work. Biskit
Great story the spanking was exciting. I thought the piss was out of order but thats just my opinion. Keep up the good work.
great story dont stop writing
i would love to help with your fantasy and fuck your arse
Just wanted to say how much i enjoyed this story.
To say it turned me on would be putting it mildly!
Keep the stories coming.
london_daz_27@yahoo.com
Your stories r great.I hope u can come back 2 write more n that u can just learn 2 block n ignore people that r so rude as 2 send rude comments.Hope all is well with u.Dont give up.These r awesomw.Much love always.:D
Good story teller, but things that stop the flow for the reader are things like "learnt". This is not a word. It's "learned". Also there are spots where you use "you" & it should be "your" or "you're".
Keep writing.
I liked it a lot. I liked how you made it seem like I had the power and control...it was quite a turn on. Keep up the great work!
I liked the story very much - just wish it were longer.
Can't wait to see more