All Comments on 'A Damsel in Distress'

Good story line, but you need to edit your typing better. It was hard to follow at times because of typos.

I can see how it's a bit confusing. Maybe you should show the difference a bit better between who is telling the story, but as for the storyline, it was fab!! thanks!!

Each part of the story needs to be clarified as to who wrote it. I think if would make more sense. Great story line. Check the weather it goes from rain to hot and dry.

I liked it but I felt like it was hurried. It bounced back and forth between the characters recounts making it confusing as to who was talking. Also, waaaaay too many typos which also made it seem like it was rushed. The story itself was great though, will there be a PART II?

I enjoyed reading the story, but I agree with the other reader, that I couldnt tell from whom the story was being told. I totally got turned on though when the black guy came in the room and joined in. Too many spelling mistakes can shatter the experience though.

went back and forth badly.misspellings.confusing story line could not follow it at all gave up.

I love your stories and read them as I play. Sometimes I get to the end in one pass. Other times I have to come back after a rest. Either way please keep the stories cumming.