All Comments on 'First Time with Daddy'

what a hot little 18 year old you are,hope there is more to cum,blp124@yahoo

Don't let cold harsh comments that serve to purpose discourage your creative side. Discard those and, instead, focus on the constructive criticisms left. Be sure to pay attention to all the details in your story. Remember what articles of clothing are already gone, and keep descriptions consistant. Don't be afraid to re-read and re-re-read before submitting. Overall, I like your style of writing, and find you more eloquent than many posted here. Try working on making the story flow more smoothly. Don't be afraid to linger on moments and really describe them in detail. Looking forward to reading more!

don't worry about what those assholes say. i think your writing is wonderful, and if they don't, they don't know what the fuck they are talking about.

Ignore the worst and concintrate on the instructive. I totaly agree with the first commentor. There are many reasons people critasize with out constructive suggestions. Mostly it is envy because they can`t write.

What did you want when you wrote this story? I think that something within you wanted to titilate. As far as I`m concerned you were successful. You made my prick hot and hard and it still is. You made me want to stroke it while reading. I did and it felt wonderful. Your writing created a picture and it drew me into it. I became daddy and fucked her and fucked her until she could take no more for awhile. What a delicious feeling you, yes you, created for me. Keep writing. success comes from experience. And thank you for the fucking hard prick. John P

I thought your story was just lovely. Sexy, kinky, made me cum

I just loved this story! Keep up the good work. I look forward to more of the same!

I like how warm and yet sexy it is. Very nicely written.

nice start, keep it up

Evadentley you must be a male or just a plain ass hole

You don't know anything about what it's like that a girl go's through when she loses her virginity.

You told about it being her first time then skipped past the most important part of what it feels like to submit your virginity.

The first time that a girl has sex no matter who it's with is a emotional and painful experience

I know from experience that when I lost my virginity to my father it took him quite awhile before he was able to penetrate me

We tried various positions trying to find a way so that it wouldn't hurt to much.

We were both extremely excited about what we were doing but

It was almost impossible for him to enter me without it hurting. Finally he ejaculated on the slit of my vagina and the seman acted as a lubricant and he was able to enter me.

I still had a hyman and when he penetrated it I felt like I was going to pass out. It hurt more than anything that I could compare it to

My daddy realized that it hurt me and staying inside of me He didn't move.

When my vagina finally got used to having his penis inside of it the muscles relaxed and it stopped hurting as much as it did at first

Slowly he began to push and withdrew his penis in and out of me until he couldn't hold back any longer and ejaculated inside of me.

We've been living together ever since that first time and we have a one year old baby girl and another baby on the way.

You should have done some research on what it's like for a girl to have sex for the first time

It would have been a lot better story

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Wonderful I love it

I think you should have started right away after her mom was passed away and made her have your babies and be your new wife

Nothing new here.

Gotta go dor the butt...

Personally I never, EVER felt a schincter feel as good as a nice wet warm pussy...

Eh

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