All Comments on 'Intruder'

It was okay

I'm not sure why some of the author's spend about 5 minutes to write something and post it... this one wasn't worth the time to leave a comment...

I don't mind critisism, but I would appreciate something more helpful. I'd like to imporove it if it's really not good. Thanks.

Sweetnpetite

Yeah I also don't know why some people would spend a second writing a comment, why not just not comment?

I liked it, it was a great non-cons piece and I think the bit at the end that it was just a RP fantasy was pretty neat too. I'm glad she enjoyed herself though because I personally like the NC thing if the girl gets pleasure, whether willing or not, but I find her crying and sobbing not particularly appealing, though that's just my tastes.

But I thought it was a well written story that's just the right size for casual reading. I wish Literotica allowed us more than just 5 rating choices. I'd give it an 80 something.

Your story hit my fantasy button. I've read other stories of yours and they are very well written. When I get all wet I know it was good.

criticism, it wasn't a bad piece of work. Try reading over it for content and for spelling. Where did her clothes go?