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I wish the mist

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by twelveoone05/30/05

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a little on the whispy side, make it longer, it has too much of a tendecy to disapppear, without transporting.

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by 05/30/05

great imagery

I saw this when I had coffee on my porch this morning.

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by twelveoone02/22/11

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good alliterative weaving. good pallitive, but that's a non poetic matter

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