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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone05/30/05

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Damn you, you made it very difficult to top lines like these:
"like some sickly sweet fragrance:
flowers just beginning to rot
in the simply too hot sun."

they sing with a very reekiness
of cliche, yet touch it not

it is a shame, we don't have a character that suggests a small pause - consider this:
of the simply too hot * sun

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by dcpoet4406/02/05

nicely done......

with great images. agree with 1201.......don

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by Anonymous06/16/05

transforming

gorgeous, captured that time perfectly- the just starting to rot bit-- put me right at my grandmother's peony bush. instantly~as

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by LeBroz01/28/07

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And the birth of something special...

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by LeBroz01/28/07

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And the birth of something special...

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