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an average 3
The thought is good. The words' O.K. - The construction is weak.
A 3?
Are you kidding me? I
think this is one of my
favorite's of yours! I love
the simplicity of your words and
the gentle beautiful flow.
I may be
a star one day
but for now I will
light my own way.
Loved that bit!
A poem doesn't have
to be full of long and
complicated words to
be profound or meaningful.
I really enjoyed this piece
and for me it gets top marks!
Thanks.
~ J
5^
Smoooth!! Very nice!
I may be
a star one day
but for now I will
light my own way.
A leaf in the wind
blowing away
as I hold to a tree
till my leaving day.
These were my favorites stanzas.
Thanks!
simplicity
is rendered throughout the piece. favorite lines:
I may be
a star one day
but for now I will
light my own way.
******
from a writers point of view. one can see the dream. i did notice the boxed format from top to bottom. line breaks may be an issue though. but i'm not a god in that arena...*LOL*
I agree
My favorite line is the one about the star too. It makes you feel hmm, I don't know, really neat.
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