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I can't believe this poem has no comments. I love this poem. Still deciding on the last line, though. Anyway, great poem.
Eve
yeah, I was not crazy about the ending either... thanks for the second opinion and for the kind comment!
J
nice concept here
and nice flow througout. the last line i'd be inclined to believe that it would be like the final enticement. if that make sense. but still you've got me pulled into this piece....don
I loved your rewrite...
of all of the classic fairytales and how you made your "him" the main character in all. Wonderful concept penned here of a fantasy I'm sure we all have had at least once {or a hundred} times in our lives This was a wonderfully enchanting expression of passionate visions of your childhood sweetheart and one and only. Thank you for sharing this dream with Me today
Vixxx
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