All Comments on 'Stephanie's Trip to the Fair'

love your story's

story idea for you a schoolgirl being tricked by her friends into going commando to school

I loved the story, except for the assault in the house of mirrors.

Thought it was horrible the way her friends didn't come to her aid. It's a form of bullying.

Why not have Stephanie's college brother help her get even?

...makes this just about unreadable!

Probably won't come back to this but if you do.

1) fix spelling and grammar.

2) Describe whats happening in more detail a bit.

3) Expanded upon the dialog instead of just summing things up quick.

4) i would love there to be a bit at the start from the perspectives of Melody and Cindy as for why they are going to be tricking Steph, is this really just pranks gone too far, or were they purposefully out to get her for a reason [if so what is it]

Why Stephanie's not order right author words put the in can't the?

Not readable grammar syntax poor and spelllllin sh!t