You turned a pretty good story into a lousy piece of shit. Why?
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Anonymous06/15/05
The previous comment
I dunno wtf the previous commenter is writing about. Personally, I wanted to bang some sense into Jenn's head when she decided what she wanted to do, and getting it on with the roommate ain't the wisest thing. Then again, people are screwups in real life, so why shouldn't they screw things up in stories, too.
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Anonymous07/15/05
Damn good.
I would reiterate about you being a dope but it seems that i dont need to. If you dont like it, dont read it. Also if you have nothing useful to say please shut up and go away.
Good work on this one btw, i like the way you intertwine emotions with your characters. Makes them seem more real some how.
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06/01/07
Nice Twist
Love the twist on the story. Still love the sex scenes.
where is/was the story??? not your best at all. not even good jerk off material!
2*
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Anonymous12/08/16
Dah, dip shit!
Leo, chapter 3 was mostly a waste, and this one was worse!!! Fuck man you started with a story and then went off into the neverland of jacking off. Stupid. Worth every bit of the 1* you got.
English
Why did you fuck up a good story?
You turned a pretty good story into a lousy piece of shit. Why?
The previous comment
I dunno wtf the previous commenter is writing about. Personally, I wanted to bang some sense into Jenn's head when she decided what she wanted to do, and getting it on with the roommate ain't the wisest thing. Then again, people are screwups in real life, so why shouldn't they screw things up in stories, too.
Damn good.
I would reiterate about you being a dope but it seems that i dont need to. If you dont like it, dont read it. Also if you have nothing useful to say please shut up and go away.
Good work on this one btw, i like the way you intertwine emotions with your characters. Makes them seem more real some how.
Nice Twist
Love the twist on the story. Still love the sex scenes.
I am betting that he will end up with Dianne...
And they will both be happy...
poor!
where is/was the story??? not your best at all. not even good jerk off material!
2*
Dah, dip shit!
Leo, chapter 3 was mostly a waste, and this one was worse!!! Fuck man you started with a story and then went off into the neverland of jacking off. Stupid. Worth every bit of the 1* you got.
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