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Good story but your chapters are too short!
My only complaint.
What should he do? Well DNA testing on the panties comes to mind. He could prove it wasn't his semen.
Then what? Live with a lying, cheating wife? I don't think so? He gave her the opportunity to 'fess up and she didn't take it. And she gave him a stupid refutable lie - "It was yours." Now she is alerted he knows. Wonder if she will cool it. I loved the "Nobody does it like you do" line. Whoops again.
Ohio, if you are going to write short chapters please write them quickly!
OK, but
My problem with this story, which isn't bad, is that he's already told her he knows. If it continues, then she's scum. She'd have to be stupid not to realize that he can count days and that they didn't have sex when she said. Why not say he knows she's lying? Why not bring things to a head? When she made an obvious lie, when it crossed his mind that she was fucking on their anniversary, he should have been more confrontational, not less.
why does he bother to 'prove'?
the only court that counts is him, and she failed there.
why does he need to prove? get a no-fault divorce, split the assets and it is over.
DNA of the thong is extra.
but is she working for time, why? is there some financial scam in progress?
Enjoying it
Don't keep us waiting too long for the next installment. A longer chapter would be appreciated.
So so....
This started out with possibilities, but now I'm wondering... It is agonizingly slow developing. This chapter could have been just a couple of paragraphs; it was hardly more. I hope the next chapter has more substance and covers more ground.
Why
qould the goofy fucker not tell Maryanne that he knew when they made love last and it was sure as hell not Thursday night. This is totally implausible.
If he was so repulsed by the idea of her fucking another man, and knowing that the guy had cum in her barebacked, could he eat her pussy? Now author, if you had said in the storyline, that he was so upset that he went to sleep in the spare room or one of the kid's rooms, that would have made more sense to this reader.
I'm afraid just like a previous poster, that he is about to wimp out, and not wanting another controntation with her, eats her pussy with a fresh load of stranger cum in her. even worse, he is so afraid to confront her about her infidelity that he raises a stump bred kid of her's and her lovers.
I hope that is not the case. I would quit reading the story right now too. Please don't let the fucker she is fucking turn out to be a black man with a 12 inch cock either. That would qualify the story for the WWW.darkwanderer.net story site.
Well....
Posting a piece of a story with just a possible next chapter is a bit like shutting an airplane off 100 feet over the end of the runway and getting out.
This one doesn't work, the wife is busted and knows it, no place left to go unless he decides to like it or something.
Hmm!
The comments generated by chapter 1 were almost universally approving, but that average appears to have taken a beating in chapter 2. For what it's worth, my opinion is that in order for the husband's reaction in the second part to be credible, there has to be at least a scintilla of doubt in his mind that she is cheating, as is the case in most stories of this nature. In this story, he has the dirty thong AND her glib and crass lie explaining how the sticky stuff came to be present on the offending article. This removes any doubt and should therefore have led to immediate confrontation, hence the frustration contained in many of the comments received so far. The search for proof in other stories, allowing the confrontation to be delayed, is, usually, to confirm a suspicion not to verify a truth already self-evident. Just my view, obviously, but you might like to cut to the chase in this story sooner rather than later. It is also my view that you write very fluently and well and I hope that you will continue to do so.
as the others say
he already knows ...and she has to be able t ocount also ...he didnt fuck her thurs... no man will eat another mans cum ...i damn sure wouldnt eat her again unless i was positive she wasnt fucking someone else ...d othe dna test i also agree this needs to come to a head much sooner than you seem to want to ... do you just wantto drag it out
Bullshit
I wept. I can't Live without her. She is my life. I wanted to cry. I'm sorry. BULLSHIT!
Sick.....
The content/plot of this story is sick, sick, sick. You are providing a dogma that is very much against human nature. So what if she is fucking another guy? I believe that in the Bible it says that God made the world in 6 days and looked back on the 7th and exclaimed that what He made was good? And that includes the ability of a man or woman to fuck others that they may not be married to, at random or at will? The last time I checked, a cock or a pussy did not have anything that was attached to their first partner to be somehow "welded" to that person for the next 70 or so years. You write with a similarity of ignorance fueled by man-made dogma. When you get around to writing true fantasy, please let me know?
IT COULD STILL TURN OUT TO BE A GOOD STORY!
I am afraid that this story has the wimp husband signs written all over it. But there still might be hope.
The story is quickly moving in the direction of the wrong genre for this story at this point – the detective genre. Sorry pal, on the front of ‘who done it, give me the proof’ the mission is fully accomplished. All the evidence - material and circumstantial is already there.
By universal consensus, and thus with the certainty of stating the obvious it is clear that at this point of the story: we all know at least three facts. First, we know for sure that, the husband knows that his wife cheated. Second, we know that the husband has all the evidence that he needs, to support a divorce claim in court. Third, therefore if the husband chooses, he could end his marriage, and the author, this story within one paragraph - not hurting the reader’s intelligence, no hard feelings.
BUT – it is not inevitable that the story should go down hill in the road of redundancy and predictability. Actually, the story is salvageable –that is, if the author shifts gear and changes focus to issues that relate to the inner psyche of the husband and may be to some extent the wife’s. At that point the story will be more of a psychological thriller. Under this domain, the story could cover a lot of ground. Other authors in this site frequently choose this avenue and the possibilities are endless.
Here are some random suggestions. Assuming that the husband does not want to throw the wife right away, change the dynamics of the relations. Declare that the husband needs some time alone to think things through. Let her brew in her own juices. Let her taste some of her own medicine. See if it brings about some real change in her. See if he wants her than. Maybe HE changes too through the process and realizes that he deserves better.
Wimp husband?
Well, of course! This story isn't going to resolve into a wimp husband theme. It already has! The man has absolutely no balls. He already KNOWS his wife is cheating, and in this chapter discovers she's done it on a day that they were supposedly celebrating their togetherness.
There may be mental problems being suffered by the wife, and if so the story could be saved. I see absolutely NO other matter that would save this. And any kind of reflection by the husband would have led him to this conclusion. Instead he is afraid to even have an open discussion with her.
I gave it a 25 strictly because the author is giving us emotion. Otherwise it was an absolute zero.
Scribe36
good so far
Oh for the love of God people, the guy is in shock that his wife just lied to him and is obviously cheating on him. Sure, he could tell her he knows she's lying but he doesn't have proof and maybe, just maybe he wants to make sure. You know, not throw away his marriage if it can be helped. Its still just chapter two. Perhaps some more plot and drama are called for before he confronts her. She obviously isn't going to tell the truth (whatever it may be) until he has undeniable proof (this happens quite a lot in real life folks). I wonder if some of you dissenters live in a fantasy world yourselves. "Just get a no fault divorce..blah blah blah." Yeah, that solves everything there..especially when the courts are biased as all hell against men. Sure, that'd be realistic. Give up his house, assets, access to kids all because he knows she lied and cheated but he has no proof. He'd be eaten alive in court.
Anyway, good story so far author. Hope to see the next chapter soon.
Wimp?
First off, i think the story is fair, but I wanted to get a word about the people calling thi a wimp in the making story. Have any of you seriously ever been in a situation where your love true or otherwise MIGHT be cheating. And thats just it...might be...not for sure. Unless you have seen the actual deed or seen pics of said event, you DONT truly know. maybe its juts wishfull thinking but if you love or have loved your wife/girlfriend, your loath to dump her just for a uncertain feeling. Now so far the story is working up to him being 100% sure, but not yet. Ok yes, in the story...shes cheating...of course she is, but he has to be convinced because he doesnt want to be. But that doesnt make him a winp...yet. Hes a wimp if he stays after hes done more searching and is a bit more sure in his head she is.Personally I like the stories where the hubby beats the shit outta the lover and kicks the wife out in the cold on her ass....anyway, wimp maybe, but let the guy get there.
Chill out!!!
Never underestimate the power of deceit of a cheater. The most important step he has to take is to find out who the person is. She will lie her ass off until he has real proof, like photos or video.
Don't know what to feel.
You have seriously hindered the flow of your story with these few paragraphs you tossed out. As you can see from the commenters, no two readers seem to be getting the same thing from your story. Wimp? Not a wimp? Who the heck can tell? We have only drabs of information. She may have been in some accident and is applying a lot of salve to a very tender area. No one sends the wife's panties out to an FBI crime lab to be tested for cum, with the possible exception of Ken Starr (remember him?) I do think you may, or may not, have something of interest going here, but your habit of prematurely ejaculating a chapter has detracted from your effort. I do hope other authors see the hazards of offering small tidbits to the discerning readers of LE.
Been there, done that...
Can't say as I like or dislike Ch 1 and 2, as I went through almost exactly what he described in the story. Even though it was 20 years ago now, I remember the details with great accuracy. What I did was got a lawyer and a detective, proved the deception, got a divorce and custody of the kids. Not a fun time.
Good Story going; but short chapters
Congrats, well written and true to life. I, like others would like the tale to be less a serial which seems to be the trend lately. I suspect that the wife has been swinging, without hubby, for a few years since the subject was first raised at the party several years ago. The problem remains the same, she violated trust and lied. Maybe I'm wrong, but there could be a few other directions the author is taking other than detective work and inevitable controntation. I am looking forward to the author's telling of the conclusion, hopefully in longer segments. Thanks for the effort. J bootmastr.
HOUSE OF CARDS!!!
You have expressed very well the fragility of all marriages and the cornerstone of sound communication. You state that these two know each other so well [" the honeymoons" look and "what is troubling you"], yet you allow your characters to "act out of character". Have them back on track to discuss the "problem" head on...like it seems they have done in the past...otherwise...you are saying the marriage was a sham from the get go ..and if there was no marriage...then no marriage is lost...because it never really existed. 'nuff said.
Nice start
I think you created some interest here. I know you did mine. I wish they were a bit longer so we have more info and not have to wait days to get another nibble.
what i would do
If i were the husband i would refuse to even touch her and spend my time with the kids and try and get proof(incase of divorce) maybe she would come to her senses and see that her husband is diguested with her atleast thats what i would
cheating slut
I really like this story so far. I also agree that it is to early to see if this husband is a wimp or not.I personally like the stories where the husbands gets revenge on his wife and her lover. Good story so far.
Surprise?
Very well witten story-- nice gradual build of the tension felt by husband. If this is typical Literotica story, wife must be pure as the driven snow and completely faithful. Cheating wives in this genre, when accused of cheating by husband, typically either turn pale and start sobbing hysterically or else they become angry and hurt and accuse the husband of being paranoid.Marianne, (I think thats her name ) merely laughs and comes up with plausible explanation for cum laden panties. She must be innocent. This is slightly reminiscent of recent story by REGade called "Tell Tale Signs" I'm betting she is innocent. 60 year old George
Please Let The Story Unfold More Commentators
Talented writting and flow - nice description of settings - emotions are cranked up among readers and his character. All in all a very good start. Those who don't understand his tentativeness haven't been there have they author.
I must admit that the sex with her was something that made me question to a degree the story path's credibility but it seemed a release for him in the manner described - almost vengeful.
So, lets be patient for a bit - give the man some room to let the story unfold - then make judgements if warranted by what occurs.
Take your time author - let it reflect your intentions and be to your standards - do it right - not harried.
Thanks again Author - I appreciate your talent, theme of consequence and time spent for our entertainment - with high Regard
I agree with "good so far"
He definitely has to have proof.
Don7654, Do you understand that when you marry the two become one. That pussy becomes part of YOU. And she is getting YOU fucked!!
Kinda sounds like she has been lured into gangbangs! Rohypnol and pictures???
I thought there was a twist coming too
but I dont see how it can plausibly happen now. After the wife's lie, Im afraid this story can only end in one of four possible ways:
- husband goes totally against character & becomes a happy swinger or willing cuckold (i.e. he forgets the bigger issue concerning the wife's lies and deceit because this was secretly what he always wanted)
- the wife gives some kind of implausible explanation for her cheating (blackmail etc) but is really broken up over hurting her husband and they reconcile. Never mind that he gave her a chance to come clean and that she glibly and without compunction lied to his face - she was really wrestling with her conscience at the time
- wife isnt cheating & the husband has some kind of head injury that impaired his short-term memory so he couldnt remember fucking his wife. Either that or some other revelation that doesnt fit with the story thus far but allows a perfectly innocent explanation for the husband's 'evidence'.
- a flawed story that is just what it seems. The wife is cheating & the husband does leave her. In this case the build-up, short chapters, husband becoming obsessed with proof when, in his mind, he already knows the answers etc would make it a flawed cheating/divorce/husbands finds someone better story IMO (see beesfan & Harddaysknight's comments). Even if the husband blurting out his suspicions & then biding his time looking for proof is realistic (which I dont think it is - at least the biding his time part), it doesnt make for good fiction.
I hope Im wrong and that the author surprizes me but I cant really see how the author can satisfactorily write himself out of the corner he's put himself in with pt 2.
No matter how it ends, thanks for writing.
Confused by a lack of balls
I'm confused by the hubby pulling in his horns, when he confronted her, and she lied to his face, and he knew it! I mean if you've got the balls to start a confrontation on this subject, why would he just drop it? Didn't fit with what was going on at the time. I am shocked and overjoyed at the number of comments against wimp, cuckold stories. It does my heart good to know I'm not the only one who is disgusted by the epidemic of these kind of stories. I hope you can figure out how to come back with an excellent chapter 3. Good luck, and keep on writin em.
Tim C.
Another Letdown?
Why is this reminding me of "Law of the Heart?"
The story is very well written, but the way it developped is very sad. The husband does not have enough balls.
If you are sure she is cheating and having unprotected sex, you are extremely dumb, not only a wimp, to have unprotected sex with her.
You give her better sex because she cheated. Is that a reward?
Get DNA test of the semen or tell her you are sure she is cheating and there is no way you are going to ever touch her and see what happens.
If the husband remains this way, he is going to lose the rest of our support in the next chapter and the story will become not worth reading anymore.
To the moron don87654: Why is anything sick if God thought it was good? Does not that include torturing and killing innocent people?
The hardest thing to do...
is give up on the one you love. Were it me I would take the thong and have it tested andc matched to my DNA. He knows it won't and then her lies are in the open. I would also not sleep there. He gave her a chance to work things out, to "get past" her mistake. The affair is more important to her than the pain it is causing and will cause in the future.
The minute she denied the affair she chose whomever she is fucking over her marriage, her husband, her kids well beingand happiness, and any other thing they had ever shared together. 16 years of love and memories are made a lie in one act, they are gone and his heart may never recover. Hers isn't broken or wounded in my view, she threw it all away for some one else the minute she began the affair. She may cry but you can't cry about breaking someones heart and say "it ment nothing" when she knew how he felt.
I also wonder if it started eight years ago with Harry and his wife.
Well written story and I look forward to the rest of it.
subtlety and personality
Dear Author,
I think you are doing a fine job. You have given these characters so much individuality that each reader is getting something different from it. That is good writing.
Many of their comments come from the point of view that the world is binary -- at every decision point there are only two options -- wimp or man.
The truth is that love and lust can lead one to do things that are out of character and even against personally held principles. Without that, all the stories that could ever be told would have been told long ago.
One critic wrote: "I must admit that the sex with her was something that made me question to a degree the story path's credibility but it seemed a release for him in the manner described - almost vengeful." I don't think this affects credibility at all. For YEARS he has had the pattern of giving his wife the benefit of the doubt. That doesn't change in an instant. He was even unable to hold back on not talking about the subject until he had proof. Good character development.
That's the great thing about writing -- the author has the power. Your only mandate is to be true to the character, not to the critics.
And as far as the short chapters -- this technique has been used for centuries. I know, the whackers among the readers are looking for instant gratification. Ohio, do it your way.
Hmmmmm
I can understand his not accepting, but enduring.
Skillful Buildup
I agree with the well thought-out comments from "studying." Tom is in a universe that is shattering all around him; you so skillfully show us his self-doubts as he begins to examine himself & his marriage.
Internally, he "knows" Marianne is cheating. Now he needs the undeniable proof. This doesn't make him into a wimp; he's taking the next step by acquiring proof so that he can end things - the affair, the marriage - either one or both.
It's your story and universe; we're only along for the ride. Citics need to remember that they reveal more about their feelings & beliefs than about the story.
confused
Have i missed something in chapter 1.that when you begin chap.2 The wife seems to be talking about apples but he (and we) is remembering oranges. I believe you have lost your point of reference. please stay focused. I really enjoy your stories.
There is some well written, sharply focused
language in this chapter that shows the pathos of infidelity:
"That afternoon was wonderful—and unbearably awful." (Such a sad juxtaposition of feelings!)
"It was clear that now I'd have to begin the dreary and banal job of proving that she was cheating." (I like the "dreary and banal" phrase - it's clear that this is no fun!)
The writing is well done - given the tone it's hard to forsee reconciliation.
Regards, DJ
she is lying
She is swinging with that guy and his wife and she doesnt want her husband to get upset at her that is why she is denieing the whole thing.
Pat
He should trust his instincts
She is a lying, cheating slut and he needs to get proof of her cheating. Thanks for the chapter..........Rich
Quite the dilemma for the husband
Well done, the story is intriguing and interesting, and I want to know more of how he will prove his doubts.
Thanks for the read
Pain
Pain and anguish is all I see. The husbands in these stories are always the ones to have to deal with the bitter fruit of adultery. I think in most cases the wife's don't as they already disrespect their husbands to fuck around. So why would they give a shit about the chaos they bring to another. Only self pity is what they feel for losing the given comfort or meal ticket. So sorry of a situation.
Interesting start but
Can't read further about a guy knowingly indulging in sloppy seconds, I'm out.
Of course he'll take her back at the end
Because Ohio just loves to have the husband keep the marriage I tack no matter how badly the wife cheats and disrespects him.
Loving it
I couldn't help but read one of the other comments about how in the end these two reconcile. You have your work cut out for you. This woman is a cold hearted cheating bitch.
wrong
Call her on the lie.....do not let it go.
I don't understand
If my wife were fucking another man, I could not fuck her even to keep up appearances. And I would vomit at the thought of getting my mouth down around her cum catcher, obviously catching someone else's cum.
But then, I'm someone that could NOT have sex with a prostitute. Hell, I had problems even having sex with my wife when I found out about the lovers before me. I guess I just don't understand and it isn't from a lack of sex drive. I can go a couple times per day 7 days per week. I just don't like the idea of putting my cock or tongue in a potentially diseased hole that already smells.
He's a fucking pussy
I'm still disgusted at the discussion he had with her in the last chapter about swinging, as if any form of adultery could be a viable option in a marriage. He opened the door for her right there.
Why Drag It Out
She's a lying slut, tell her about her "Honeymoon" face and refusal to let him near her cunt, and the fact that he KNOWS he didn't fuck her that Thursday night.
Sbrooks103
Oh are you going to be disappointed!
You wept??
What kind of girly-boy are you? No wonder your wife is cheating on you!!
In this day and age, when divorce rates are almost 50%, suspecting your spouse of cheating shouldn't come as THAT big a surprise. I guess we now know why she cheated on you - wuss....
A clear cut case of the author's skill of emoting pain and bewilderment working against the narrator in terms of audience sympathy
To me , this is great ' Literotica ' writing . The vulnerability of Tom is too raw , honest and disconcerting . Tom broke down and cried when he was alone at the loss of his of the woman he ' thought ' he had as well as the truthfulness and fidelity in his marriage . It had the same impact on him as it would the death of his parents or children. I would hope the critics would shed tears for family members passing on.
It sent Tom to the bottom and he lost control at first opportunity to be undiscovered , so what ? What counts is how he dealt with the mendacity and cheating, once the solitary tears ceased. A cursory perusal of the bible shows the greatest figures and warriors wept . Joseph , David and of course Jesus all cried. What a bunch of puzzles , eh ?
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