All Comments on 'My Desire'

a very nice write <grin> (O_O)

Wow a hot lil poem here gurl~!!

I love your imagery.

I can also see a very sweet kinda love goin on here, love it~!!

More Please~!!

This is hotly erotic without the all-too frequent "nasties". Thank you.

Tess

reminded me of some personal memories

of the more wholesome kind,

where love found erotic and coexisted,

...you speak of the growing desire and the anticipation, and focus on the buildup. It is all too tempting to leave those times unspoken, yet they are often more intense then they're release.

I think "Dewey" is actually a name, were you thinking of "dewy"? The only other part I might change is "man's desire"...how about "his desire" to make it more individual and personal?

Lovingly and sensuously erotic

great imagery