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excellent
a very nice write (O_O)
Longing~
Wow a hot lil poem here gurl~!!
I love your imagery.
I can also see a very sweet kinda love goin on here, love it~!!
More Please~!!
I agree
This is hotly erotic without the all-too frequent "nasties". Thank you.
Tess
Enjoyed it a lot
reminded me of some personal memories
of the more wholesome kind,
where love found erotic and coexisted,
I like how...
...you speak of the growing desire and the anticipation, and focus on the buildup. It is all too tempting to leave those times unspoken, yet they are often more intense then they're release.
I like the last two lines especially....
I think "Dewey" is actually a name, were you thinking of "dewy"? The only other part I might change is "man's desire"...how about "his desire" to make it more individual and personal?
Ahhhhhh yes
Lovingly and sensuously erotic
great imagery
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