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this
just had such a nice feeling and the last verse just seemed to take it away...was that intended? *blue*
Blue
I wanted a hard end. Get your asses to the beach, see
things by the light of day. The mind can get too dark,
and we ain't as smart as we think we are. sandspike
Fuck yes!
This bit drew a smile:
you age and wilt with worry
in your own self importance
Then I thought I'd tell you that the second verse was my favorite, cause it was. Until I read the ending!
Great job, I relate totally!
Thanks
No wonder....
...my muse quit on the Slow/Cellar Door challenge. You set the standard frighteningly high, SS.
Tess
strong writing
To me there seems to be an excellent balance between imagery and opinion. I love Open The Cellar Door! Great writing.
*In your face*
Wow. Very bold and straight forward.
Flowed so smooth, such an interesting lil ride.
What a picture you have painted with this one.
Yes I most def. think you got your *hard* ending.
Carried it off beautifully~!!
the last line
was perfect.
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