All Comments on 'Angela's Way Ch. 01'

by Lustin Kink

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msboy8msboy8almost 19 years ago
Excellent Beginning!

Hot sex and filled with emotion. An excelent start and good writing. I only saw one error, the use of "you're" where it should have been "your". One good way to check is to break "you're' up into it's two componts "you are" and see if it fits. Keep writing!

silverwhispersilverwhisperalmost 19 years ago
impressive!

well-told story, lustin! i think it's quite good. i would however like for a bit more exploration in chapter 2 about why angela didn't barge in & confront her husband. but that's for chapter 2. :>

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
AGREE AGREE!!!

needs a chapter 2

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Very good but...

I do have a problem with the plot line. A "phony return address" and NOT signing the note suggests Angela DOESN'T want her husband to know she is sending the tape...BUT what kind of fool husband wouldn't recognize his own den (which he decorated himself) not to mention the numerous times Angela smiled directly into the 'hidden' camera! Hope I'm wrong about the plot line and otherwise a very nice start!

chytownchytownover 3 years ago
Weird But Interesting Storyline****

Good opening for what I hope is a good series. Thanks for sharing.

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