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Hot until the end...
You had a great, fun, sexy story until the end. You dropped the ball on the one yard line. Keep writing, I'll expect better from you.
i agree
I agree... the story was great!!! Just delete the very last paragraph ;)
Apart from that... loved it.
They don't know what their talking about.
PERFECT as always.
great
hot story really liked twist at the vine doing him too
great
hot story really liked twist at the vine doing him too
Interesting
Some spots where I think your wording could be better, and you should develop or at least describe your characters a little. Also, some more detail about the plant and how it senses it's "prey" would be good.
Otherwise, an interesting story. I like that the plant turned on it's creator, and it taking pictures of them was a nice touch, though a bit hard to believe. This is where some more detail about the plant would be helpful. Is their some element of it's genetic manipulation that could explain this?
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