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The Paled Dawn

byKaishaku©
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by Anonymous

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by dcpoet4406/22/05

this one....

is conveyed to me in the language i can relate to. it is a nicely done piece.....don

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by Anonymous06/22/05

Nice climax

I enjoyed your deceptive simplicity as always but the one thing that didn't work for me was /The force/grinds us/together

It feels as though some third party is involved. Maybe it's just me.

b'brig

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by Jennifer C06/23/05

nice

a good build up and
an enjoyable read,
thanks.
~ J

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