All Comments on 'Fortune Shines Ch. 03'

This would be vastly improved if it was possible to follow. Who is saying (or typing) what and when?

I'm curious ;oD

It's still playing out. I'll work on making it easier to understand. Thanks for the feedback.

Please keep it going. I like your style - its subtle and makes me think. And the story has alsorts of possibilities. I like that only the girl is anonymous; the guy is very vulnerable. I've read a few stories on this site and been searching for an original idea. This is the first comment I've left on any story. Pete.

i'm deeply disappointed to see how long it has been since this was added to and i can only hope that you haven't abandoned it. i disagree with anyone claiming it is difficult to follow. very well written. please continue.