Very good and hot start. You have laid a reasonable groundwork for what could be an awesome series. Please continue. Add Mom, sisters, etc as needed.
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Anonymous08/30/05
that was hot
that was hot....i'm so wet make me cum baby..
by
Anonymous01/16/06
Hard Making Stuff
Man, that was great! I agree, it's a great start to a series. Any chance of more?
by
Anonymous04/16/06
its hot
its hot.. everything happen a lil fast for my taste but it made me wet
by
Anonymous02/12/08
wats next?
Im waitin 4 da next chapter!
by
Anonymous02/03/10
More?
I realize it's been a long time since this was written, but it's really very good, and a continuation would be great.
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Anonymous10/16/10
Very Good
if you please have a continuation of this story its very good...
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Anonymous11/18/12
Edit!
All the potential to entertain lost on lack of editing. Just take your time, your readers don't have to cum in less than seven minutes. Let it breathe a little and smooth out the little things. But I agree with the prior comment, fake women stand out in prose. What do they really look like?
English
nice..
but 26/28c?.. what's that in height? 4'5"?.. it's nearly impossible to have such a small body..
hott
that was hot. turned me on .. im dripping wet now
Hot Start to a Good series!
Very good and hot start. You have laid a reasonable groundwork for what could be an awesome series. Please continue. Add Mom, sisters, etc as needed.
that was hot
that was hot....i'm so wet make me cum baby..
Hard Making Stuff
Man, that was great! I agree, it's a great start to a series. Any chance of more?
its hot
its hot.. everything happen a lil fast for my taste but it made me wet
wats next?
Im waitin 4 da next chapter!
More?
I realize it's been a long time since this was written, but it's really very good, and a continuation would be great.
Very Good
if you please have a continuation of this story its very good...
Edit!
All the potential to entertain lost on lack of editing. Just take your time, your readers don't have to cum in less than seven minutes. Let it breathe a little and smooth out the little things. But I agree with the prior comment, fake women stand out in prose. What do they really look like?
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