I liked it, it was a good addition. You did get the girls mixed up a few times though.
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Anonymous02/19/06
okay
needs to be longer with more details and as far as MIA goes personally id say hell no because i wouldnt share my girls with nobody. and if you do make a sequel have him knock them both up.
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Anonymous03/02/06
Takes a lot of loving to keep those 2 girls happy,
I don't know how long the poor man's heart can hold out, but if he needs help, I'll volunteer until mine gives out..
Hot story. Honeymoon story should be a blast.
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I liked it, it was a good addition. You did get the girls mixed up a few times though.
okay
needs to be longer with more details and as far as MIA goes personally id say hell no because i wouldnt share my girls with nobody. and if you do make a sequel have him knock them both up.
Takes a lot of loving to keep those 2 girls happy,
I don't know how long the poor man's heart can hold out, but if he needs help, I'll volunteer until mine gives out..
Hot story. Honeymoon story should be a blast.
Good story
My only suggestion would have been to combine the two chapters; separately, they feel overly short and the first chapter has an air of the incomplete.
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