Now What Do I Do?

Please add to the story

Good story please add to it and keep it going.

not bad at all

good start to the story.gotta give a bit more of a build up.going straight in and fucking her,nice but needs a lot more back round

Now...

Quite good - sure in need of editing!
Lukas

Hey good story

Make a another round of cp. 02 go for it......

Loved it.

I liked the twist with Lila causing the incest, original in my opinion, keep up with more chapters.

awesome

that was great...seems like she remembered after all lol. great story; loved how it all worked out. wil there b more?

Arousing Story

It would have been better if you would have had an editor to fix mistakes. Try getting one before you do chapter 2 and definitely do another chapter.

A very good story!!

I like this twist!!! The girl friend getting the brother and sister together. And what a thrill it would be to have your girlfriend and your sister licking and sucking on you and then your sister fucking you!!!! Oh man. Take advantage of it and go for it all!! Keep writing !!!

Could be Worse, Could Be Better

I like stories about three-ways, even written a few myself, and this first effort shows some promise. But let me join the others in urging you to subject your stories to more editing before you turn them loose on the public.

Could be Worse, Could Be Better

I like stories about three-ways, even written a few myself, and this first effort shows some promise. But let me join the others in urging you to subject your stories to more editing before you turn them loose on the public.

You have talent.

Don't let some of the critics get you down. You have talent and only need to do some careful editing. Then you'll have them all so jealous, they'll be seeing stars. Keep at it and I'll look forward to reading more in the future. You might even continue with this story because it shows promise in being an excellent multi-part project. 

THis story needs to be continued

WOW

I LUVED IT

I WAS HARD AS A ROCK BEFORE IT WAS OVER !

Consider it said

Editing. OK, I'm sure you got the message. Now finish this thing before I have a fucking stroke! Have a nice day...

Editing?

I was so engrossed in the story that I didn't even notice any mistakes. Please write a second chapter. That story was too short! Great job!

Very Good

Nice.

wait for chpter 2

its realy good storie and i wat for more chpter from it

Very nice and so sweet...

along with being very sexy and sensual.. you left the door open for a follow up. Please don't close the door, just continue. If I were you, after you finish your next story I would try to re-read it over at least 3 times, but on different days. That way you will probably pick out the small errors. Most of the mistakes were tiny and a fresh mind would catch them. Good luck.

So much for chapter #1! When is the next episode!?

You have a verry good start!! Now don't be a tease ! MOOOORE please!

Nice

Keep up the good work and give us chapter 2!

Please Do!!

between 1 and 100 i rate this 1,000,000 the best i have ever read! please write a chapter 2!!!!!!!!

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Now that was a good ending, you should really make a new one

kya baat hai!!!!

awesome loved it keep writing

niiice

Short but good

I think it was too short and didn't have enough build up or communication between the sister and the brother. The build up wasn't long enough

Part Two

would love a part two

an amazing story, but the cliffhanger leaves to many questions.

an excellent story of hot sisterfucking by a gifted writer

I think Magic Wand would be a good name for what the big brother's got between his legs. It works real well up his girlfriend's cute little cunt and especially up his kid sister Diane's sweet little slit. It's great when a boy can blow his brotherly balls up his own sister's twat.

it's pretty clear to me actually

She. Knows. Everything.
And Remembers everything

lucky guy

wild girlfriend and hot and horny sister!

keep it going

Great story keep it going.

Go for it

Give your sister and girlfriend all the love and sex that they can take! You only live once, make the most of the time you have.