by X_Chrissy_X
thats it im gonna try that at the next opportunity i get. its got me creaming. purrrrrrrrrrrrr
you did a great job writing the story. i loved it. keep up the good work.
Your profile says you love to tease, but this story was very rushed. Take your time, and also use proper puncuation with the dialogue. The way it was written was like a long drone that could have been read by the guy that used to do those Fed Ex commercials.
There was a story there, just relax and let it tell itself.