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I remember being impressed with this when I saw it in the contest. I love the unusual wording to match the unusual character.
"at the
fair last fall."
She is a great character!
"She has bottles
everywhere. Some are
empty, but most are filled to
some degree by
berries and gin
or by berry-tinged
gin waiting to be
strained pure."
awesome image, unique...
I would recommend you change the title for uses other than the contest, and consider switching up on the "She" phrase that starts a few stanzas.
ex. Bottles are everywhere. instead of She has bottles everywhere, etc.
Excellent!
annaswirls
i dig it......
and love the smoothness of the lines as they flowed. good images too.
I see her in
my mind as
easily as I saw
her at the
fair last fall.
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that is what i really like the best here. a lot of power in them words. we all have our individual taste. nicely done.....don
nicely done
I love the visual
images in this, it paints
the picture in my mind.
Lovely well wriiten poetry,
a pleasure to read.
Thanks.
~ Jenn
A good one I voted for
I thought this was a great write the 1st time I read it. I still do. sand
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