I must say that I actually teared up reading this this. Great ending. It's been a while since a story has touched me the way this one has. One of the best and one of my favorites.
What a great story from beginning to end. But I've got to tell you, you rang my chimes with the ending. My wife died of Ovarian cancer almost 10 years ago and I can feel his pain. Anyway Thank You! Ronnie W.
A very heartfelt, touching ending. It caused tears to fall. I must be old to become so maudlin. Loved this ending. This could be a story unto itself, really.
Great Story from beginning to end. The love that the whole family felt for each other was very evident. The pain and sorrow felt by each of the wive's death was also well written. A most unusual love story. Thanks for a good read.
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
This is the epitome of a grandly executed idea. the characters are all believable and I loved the ending. The deserved rest and reward for the good life lived is a seldom told story on this site lately. Well done and perfectly executed. my thanks for your effort.
by
Anonymous10/17/05
boundary breaking
i thought ath this was amazing, i was thinking that after the second part that things wold fall apart, but if dnt right as you have it, it works in the end. lovely story.
i wish that you would go through and do other stories with these characters.. and bring up the orginal 3 from time to time. keep writing these, please.
--a. lynne
That was one of the best stories I have read. Even though I am a guy and I hardly ever cry unless I am in alot of pain, I cried like a baby...lol Really great story. Keep up the good work and maybe you could write an alternate ending to this story. One with a happy ending that doesn't make you cry...lol
I'm a 55 yr. old factory worker. I'm not supposed to be boo-hooing over some story on the internet. I really enjoyed that it was truly a 'Loving Wives' story. It wasn't built on deceit and betrayal, although those elements were initially present, and it wasn't driven by pain or revenge. Yet, even without these emotional triggers so common to this genre, I unexpectedly find myself deeply moved by your story. Reading your works chronologically, it seems to me that you are getting better each time out. PLEASE continue to share your talent here. I'll just have to go buy myself a hankie.
FANTASTIC, great plot, great character development
I truly almost missed this story, read your most recent submission, really liked it, so I went to your other stories, saved this series for last; and you BLEW ME AWAY! Without a doubt, one of the best stories on this or any other site, that I believe I've ever read, especially from an "amateur" author {which, BTW, you definitely are not). The story line was very well done, believable characters, very nice plot development; and the ending was all and more than I could have wished for. The ending expresses my belief in the afterlike to a "T", and like others who have commented, it moved me to tears. I really want you to write more, your work is outstanding, you should consider "romance" writing for publicatoin in mainline publishers. Great, great work, & I truly hope you are motivated to write again. BTW, your most recent, Beyond Repair, is also very good, although a bit truncated. I'd like to see a sequel, where maybe the wife realizes, but too late, just what she gave up.
by
Anonymous01/27/07
Wow
All I can say is unbelievable. That might be the most amazing story I've ever read.
by
Anonymous02/10/07
How did I miss this?
Sitting here with tears rolling down my cheeks. How have I not read this before. FANTASTIC story.
by
Anonymous03/17/07
The very best...
The best story I have ever read on this site AND the first time I submitted a comment. I am a male who does not cry too often but I really teared up for this story. PLEASE, PLEASE keep writing. It would truly be a great loss if you don't continue.
Why the hell dont you write more? Looking forward to anything new from you.
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Anonymous01/24/08
The story made me smile.
Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. It was a great story and I wish you would write more. It made me sad and happy. I love everything about the story, esp. the ending. Waiting for your future works of art! Keep writing.
by
Anonymous02/15/08
WOW!
now that is one outstanding last chapter. the best. you got me crying, dang it!
by
Anonymous04/11/08
simply beautiful
Thank You!
by
Anonymous06/20/08
2nd time
reading this story and it still makes tear up. best last chapter i've ever read.
I am a grizzly old codger. Your story made ME cry. I don't mist up over a story, what just happened to me. You have talent and you have such potential, and if you bio is accurate you are still so young. Thank you very much for the story. anon jerry
by
Anonymous11/10/09
True and Eternal
best I have read on lit. and I read a lot
by
Anonymous06/29/10
I think....
that you need to check yourself into a mental asylum. You seiouly need help. This is what you call a story?
No Words to express the emotions i felt while reading your work. It is a wonderful story with wonderful beginning in the end, hope could find such relationships in real world(not refering to polygamy but the feelings of love, trust, and companionship). Expecting more of this kind of masterpiece from you ...............Thax for your contribution.
by
Anonymous07/15/10
SPEECHLESS....
THIS STORY WAS.. INCREDIBLE!!! I MEAN I FELT EVERY EMOTION IN THE BOOK.. HAPPY SAD MAD GUILTY... I MEAN THIS STORY IS LIKE ARTWORK!!! AND YOU FIT IT ALL IN 3 CHAPTERS!!!!! I THINK I OFFICIALLY LOVE YOU!! LOL! THIS PEICE WAS AMAZING!!! A TRUE 5/5!! YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE!!! THANKZ FOR AN AWESOME READ!
by
Anonymous08/15/10
Wow I cried
And I'm a guy that never cries. That should tell you how moved I was.
A timeless storyline with balanced emotions and feelings......the best ending with a wonderful beginning. Even after all these years the story still touches emotional side............!
Really enjoyed your story and hope there will be more in the future.
by
Anonymous04/09/11
An old romantic
WOW! what can I say.Even at my age (Not young) tears can still come to the eyes.It had everything a story can have.Sex Romance.A little violence...... Once again...WOW!
by
Anonymous05/11/11
One of the best....
Great series! Thank You. Please continue to write.
by
Anonymous07/01/11
Best Ending!
brought some tear to my eyes. didnt know i was allergic. lol. Awesome story. Thanks!
I'm male, 65, and hetro. This yarn gave me wet eyes more than once. Good stuff and many thanks.
It would be nice to think that the spirit lives on, one never knows.
English
Wow great ending
I must say that I actually teared up reading this this. Great ending. It's been a while since a story has touched me the way this one has. One of the best and one of my favorites.
You pulled out all of the stops on this
What a great story from beginning to end. But I've got to tell you, you rang my chimes with the ending. My wife died of Ovarian cancer almost 10 years ago and I can feel his pain. Anyway Thank You! Ronnie W.
Touching ending....
A brilliant ending to a great story. Looking forward to the next series!
Really great...
A very heartfelt, touching ending. It caused tears to fall. I must be old to become so maudlin. Loved this ending. This could be a story unto itself, really.
Thanks for writing this.
Wow
Great Story from beginning to end. The love that the whole family felt for each other was very evident. The pain and sorrow felt by each of the wive's death was also well written. A most unusual love story. Thanks for a good read.
beautiful
A truly beautiful story.
Very nicely done.
Excellent
Beautiful, heart warming story. Some things do transcend time and death and it's nice to be reminded of them from time to time. Kudos Doc!
Wonderful
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
Doug
Wonderful
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
Doug
Wonderful
I can't think of a thing to say that would better this story. It's original, brings out the emotions all the way along. It is unblushingly romantic, which suits this old romantic completely.
Doug
Fantastic Story
You did a great job writing it and it was very original idea. I hope you continue writing stories like this for a very long time.
One of the best
The story was great from start to finish. The writing was excellent and I look forward to more from you.
Fantastic and imaginative story!
This is the epitome of a grandly executed idea. the characters are all believable and I loved the ending. The deserved rest and reward for the good life lived is a seldom told story on this site lately. Well done and perfectly executed. my thanks for your effort.
boundary breaking
i thought ath this was amazing, i was thinking that after the second part that things wold fall apart, but if dnt right as you have it, it works in the end. lovely story.
i wish that you would go through and do other stories with these characters.. and bring up the orginal 3 from time to time. keep writing these, please.
--a. lynne
So nice…
to see a story all the way through to the end.
Nicely done.
Outstanding
A very touching and loving story. It brought tears to my eyes. Very well done.
Wow
That was one of the best stories I have read. Even though I am a guy and I hardly ever cry unless I am in alot of pain, I cried like a baby...lol Really great story. Keep up the good work and maybe you could write an alternate ending to this story. One with a happy ending that doesn't make you cry...lol
Thanx
hope you have some more in you
Dammit man!
I'm a 55 yr. old factory worker. I'm not supposed to be boo-hooing over some story on the internet. I really enjoyed that it was truly a 'Loving Wives' story. It wasn't built on deceit and betrayal, although those elements were initially present, and it wasn't driven by pain or revenge. Yet, even without these emotional triggers so common to this genre, I unexpectedly find myself deeply moved by your story. Reading your works chronologically, it seems to me that you are getting better each time out. PLEASE continue to share your talent here. I'll just have to go buy myself a hankie.
FANTASTIC, great plot, great character development
I truly almost missed this story, read your most recent submission, really liked it, so I went to your other stories, saved this series for last; and you BLEW ME AWAY! Without a doubt, one of the best stories on this or any other site, that I believe I've ever read, especially from an "amateur" author {which, BTW, you definitely are not). The story line was very well done, believable characters, very nice plot development; and the ending was all and more than I could have wished for. The ending expresses my belief in the afterlike to a "T", and like others who have commented, it moved me to tears. I really want you to write more, your work is outstanding, you should consider "romance" writing for publicatoin in mainline publishers. Great, great work, & I truly hope you are motivated to write again. BTW, your most recent, Beyond Repair, is also very good, although a bit truncated. I'd like to see a sequel, where maybe the wife realizes, but too late, just what she gave up.
Wow
All I can say is unbelievable. That might be the most amazing story I've ever read.
How did I miss this?
Sitting here with tears rolling down my cheeks. How have I not read this before. FANTASTIC story.
The very best...
The best story I have ever read on this site AND the first time I submitted a comment. I am a male who does not cry too often but I really teared up for this story. PLEASE, PLEASE keep writing. It would truly be a great loss if you don't continue.
great series
excellent. truly enjoyed it. Kudos!
Thanks
for a very fine read. Now let me dry my
eyes... You know I felt sorry for
Tom! He really screwed up because of his insecurity.
Reads even better the 2nd time around
I had read this series when it was posted and stumbled upon it again. Wow. Good work, DWC.
Fantastic
Why the hell dont you write more? Looking forward to anything new from you.
The story made me smile.
Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. It was a great story and I wish you would write more. It made me sad and happy. I love everything about the story, esp. the ending. Waiting for your future works of art! Keep writing.
WOW!
now that is one outstanding last chapter. the best. you got me crying, dang it!
simply beautiful
Thank You!
2nd time
reading this story and it still makes tear up. best last chapter i've ever read.
what a way to conclude a story
thank you for sharing.
i can't...
...see the comments for the tears rolling down my cheeks. That last scene was BEAUTIFUL...
THE Best!
WOW!
Absolutely
BEAUTIFUL!!
This is why I read at Literotica.
Damn....
I am a grizzly old codger. Your story made ME cry. I don't mist up over a story, what just happened to me. You have talent and you have such potential, and if you bio is accurate you are still so young. Thank you very much for the story. anon jerry
True and Eternal
best I have read on lit. and I read a lot
I think....
that you need to check yourself into a mental asylum. You seiouly need help. This is what you call a story?
The Best ....................!
No Words to express the emotions i felt while reading your work. It is a wonderful story with wonderful beginning in the end, hope could find such relationships in real world(not refering to polygamy but the feelings of love, trust, and companionship). Expecting more of this kind of masterpiece from you ...............Thax for your contribution.
SPEECHLESS....
THIS STORY WAS.. INCREDIBLE!!! I MEAN I FELT EVERY EMOTION IN THE BOOK.. HAPPY SAD MAD GUILTY... I MEAN THIS STORY IS LIKE ARTWORK!!! AND YOU FIT IT ALL IN 3 CHAPTERS!!!!! I THINK I OFFICIALLY LOVE YOU!! LOL! THIS PEICE WAS AMAZING!!! A TRUE 5/5!! YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE!!! THANKZ FOR AN AWESOME READ!
Wow I cried
And I'm a guy that never cries. That should tell you how moved I was.
Brilliant
Absolutely loved it
THANKS
a Wonderful piece of work
A timeless storyline with balanced emotions and feelings......the best ending with a wonderful beginning. Even after all these years the story still touches emotional side............!
Well, this story just about had everything...
Really enjoyed your story and hope there will be more in the future.
An old romantic
WOW! what can I say.Even at my age (Not young) tears can still come to the eyes.It had everything a story can have.Sex Romance.A little violence...... Once again...WOW!
One of the best....
Great series! Thank You. Please continue to write.
Best Ending!
brought some tear to my eyes. didnt know i was allergic. lol. Awesome story. Thanks!
Everything they said
and more. The best ever...
Wet eyes
I'm male, 65, and hetro. This yarn gave me wet eyes more than once. Good stuff and many thanks.
It would be nice to think that the spirit lives on, one never knows.
I hate you, Doc!
A 53 year-old, Retired Chief-of-Firing Battery has no reason to cry over an Internet short story. May the fleas of a 100 ferrets infest your scalp! :)
Damn good read.
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