All Comments on 'Separate Lives Pt. 02'

Ron makes vice president amd is moving back home. Will he and Sherry get back together? Maybe. It seems that Sherry is all for reconcileation. But is Ron ready?

Well damn, Longhorn!

Is there anything you can't write about? Your descriptions of sex/love making are top notch. But did you HAVE to bring in the Marines? (I'd best watch it before the Semper Fi crowd beats me silly.) At least Army medicine fixed him up. You are writing at a superb level.

I read comments from Pt 1, posted after my earlier offering there that make it clear the story's been posted elsewhere. So it looks like (from what's been said) that reconciliation is in the works. (BEESFAN - I liked your comments on pt1). I just hope you can keep up the level of your writing and make it believable.

I like the way you're splitting off and giving the reader multiple viewpoints. We can see here that Sherrie now understands what it means to be married - bit late to have that little epiphany. Still, the impression I get is that Sherrie still loves Ron and is considering herself still married (spiritually, at least)although legally divorced.

We see the healing that has happened "back home" but this is something Ron has yet to experience. So it will be interesting to see how long it takes to bridge the chasm Sherrie created.

Finally, the length of your story has made everything that has transpired "more real." The only minor flaw is an understanding of Sherrie's screwing around; we can tell she's sorry now but it's hard to accept that it won't happen again without knowing that Sherrie herself understands why she did it. (I know, more psych talk which'll set of the troll freaks).

Again, congrats on the great work to date.

Not even patriotism is going to get you any points if he ends up with Sherrie.

I don't like that sickly feeling.

I come to this site for the erotic stuff which you do well, but I was amazed at how much I enjoyed the military part. Great story. Can't wait to see what 3 brings.

You should have left it at Part 1. Sorry, but that is the way I feel. The wrting IS exceptional. But, with the way things have been going I have to assume that you are in the process of protraying how we all become flawed at metamorphosize into that which we despise.

The sex scenes were very well done, but I don't read most of that stuff anyway. When I do there are authors out here who do a superlative job. But I read this as a good story initially. I have noticed the development of 2 character flaws which are pointing to why Ron MUST end up with Sherrie.

First his inabiity to commit to anyone. 4 years before he "asked" Karen to marry him? Second, rather slack attitude about women in general. Heck, even after losing the second woman he wanted to marry he was out dating in less than 2 weeks! some grief period! lol!

All this does point to Sherrie being his main sqeeeze. But the intesity of the first story was sadly laking here. Even the changing of points of veiw was morre annoying to me that a help in appreciating the storyline. But it was useful in giving us a view of what is happining in Sherrie's life.

I liek the writing and am waiting to see where this goes. I still think the first part stood on its own though. :-)

Regards

great story can't wait to see where you are going with this

great story can't wait to see where you are going with this

you are leading this right back to him and sherrie getting back together and im not sure i like that idea afterthe way the first chapter went ...but ill wait and see what your reasoning is

I can't quite see the breakup with Karen. She may not think of marriage but the two had a great love life. No reason it couldn't have continued until she felt he was ready.

Well, it looks like he is going to run into Sherrie, one way or another.

I'll be interested in seeing just how the author gets them back together.

But to be honest i don't like where the story is headed.Looks like u are going to have them end up together again unless u throw one hell of a twist at the end.I don't mind a happy ending from time to time but in this particular story i don't.But u are the author and of course u write the story.Waiting for the next chapter.great story.

Great writing, great characters and good action. (Both the erotic and non-erotic.)I really liked how you worked an additional point of view into the story. Melissa's diary was a brilliant little piece of work.

From friends of mine who worked in contract situations in Kuwait and Afghanistan,

I have heard that they end up looking at things going on around them the same way as the military does. This is from people whose closest brush with the miltary to that point had been a John Wayne movie. They were amazed at the change when they noticed it. You protrayed that change very smoothly and seamlessly. Well done!

Another seamless change towards the end of the story was when Melissa started referring to Karen as "that Karen person". So even Melissa's attitude towards Sherrie is changing. Very interesting--Loved it.

I am constantly amazed how people here refuse to let an author write their own story. It's their story, let them tell it their way.

You've done a great job here Longhorn, looking forward to reading the rest of it. I was right in my comments on the first chapter, that the second one would be good. JimDinMN

only thing I don't like about it is the predictablility of the "Ron" character. Already knew before he took up with Karen that he is going find some way to get back to Sherrie.

The writing is first rate, you did everything right to peak my interest.

I must admit that it is superbly written but after your last story I keep waiting for it to fall apart in phycobabble as it did before. And no hypnotism puulleease!!

Hopefully not as it is truly being told by a Story Teller of considerable proportion. Better than nice work Author - In fact - KUDO's all over the place. Incredibly credible so far!

With High Regard - so far eh

I'm enjoying it so far. My only quibble might be to find out why exactly Karen broke up with him. I hope you don't (or didn't intend to) leave that unsaid.

You know, Sherries two "roommates"? Who's the daddy?

While part 2 was an enjoyable read, it only advanced the plot by half a page. All the rest is totally irrelevant. I realize that professionalism is about sticking irrelevant details to inflate the size of the story, but that is why I do not read commercial soft covers.

Ron is telling his story. I feel like he is sitting with me and telling me the story. Suddenly I get excerpts from Melissa's diary. I do not know where they came from. As the story is being told from Ron's point of view the reader should not know anything that Ron did not know. If that information was important and it affected him somehow, he could have said, I learned later that so and so happened. He could also say, meanwhile, so and so happened. We would figure out that he learned it later. The diary excerpts suggested where the story is headed, but the reader did not need to know that yet. Some people liked this trick, but to me it made the story seem unreal. When I read a story I want to feel like it is real. The diary excerpts took that away from me, and gave me information I should not know.

Ros is like a brother to Melissa. Where did this come from? What kind of brother does not get to visit his sister or get visited by his sister who lives in the same town? This seems like an after thought slapped into the story.

The erotic scenes were well done, but I felt they were stuffed into the story just because it is an erotic story not because they belonged there. The were overemphasized. That caused me to skim and skip through them.

The war scene was also very well conceived, but it hardly had anything to do with the story. It felt just like a show off. It could have been summarized by one or at most two paragraphs.

Accidentally everybody showing up at Fischer's was an over kill. I was surprised her lover did not end up there that night. Maybe he did, but neither Ron not Melissa knew.

All in all, part 2 should have been half a page. It should have been appended by part 3.

Excellent writing style, but the plot leaves something to be desired.

Thanks.

I’ll have to agree,at least to a degree, with Minigales comments (Great Writing but Irrelevant).Yet, I have to confess. I thoroughly enjoyed the lengthy tangentially bound tales in this story! Yes, you are right it is not a tight story (That would be my ultimate ideal in a story), but far be it for me to complain - not too much anyway…I mean, how often do you find the “simple” quality of a very good story teller?

So, keep it coming. Call it part 3 ;4 ;5 of “Separate lives”, or call it “The continued tales of Ron”, or make up a different name for each submission. As long as the characters are credible, (and they are) and as long as the plot is captivating, and I can still hold the thread of names places and time frames – than keep writing, I can not wait!!

p.s. At some point in the story, one of the characters confesses that she had been starting to loose parts of that thread already!

Doesn't look good for our hero. Looks like he's gonna WIMP OUT like some cuckold pussy boy. I'll bet the eX convinces him the "room mates" are his. (No! I HAVEN'T read the next part yet).

I can see the writing on the wall; and I probabley will NOT evern read the next installment. Obviously, the head bang rearranged his brains.

this story is slowly dragging out downhill. longhorn, it doesn't make sense that karen (being so concientious and professional) would go down on the first date. yet, she does ,and still she has such high morals even though she loves ron she won't marry him and plan on working things out. sure, she wants his happines more than hers and she wants him to go and marry slutwife. happens all the time. why didn't you have him brain injured and then he could have forgotten the images of loverboy and slutwife. i don' think i will suffer through the process of you trying to convince us sherrie has learned to be a good wife and that she should be forgiven and her and ron can suffer through a healing process to ultimately prove love conquers all, especially since ron didn't get amnesia. if love conquered all she wouldn't have cucked ron. thanks, but no-thanks. rc

Even though you will have a lot of people accusing you

of wimping out when the obvious conclusion comes down

the pipes. I think the two roommates key should have been held out of this chapter.

oblique movements. Karen was his ideal, a shame he could not see it clearly. Obviously his ex is a compulsive obcessive that refuses to accept the fact she is really worth nothing. If you are going to say the roommates were his children I really think if she kept that a secret he should just kill her. To have children and never be told by the mother is one of the worst possible actions of any woman. We can also say, that since the fucked bareback the other guy after she fucked him, parenthood would have to be proven with DNA testing. The woman is a known liar and cheater amongst other negative qualities. No way in hell should they get back together. The portral of the in country events in the Afgan outback is interesting but hardly important to anything other than Karen wanting to know why he didnt love her enough to actually ask her to marry him.

I thinks Sherries two roommates are twins, maybe her ex's or her lovers. Too bad Ron didn't learn anything from the Marine squad. Sic Semper, always faithful--words to live and die by for men and good advise for wives.

A bit rambling, but that fits real life doesn't it? In real life, Karen would have been perfect for him, but she won't accept most of him. She wants all or none. Sad for her but then she isn't real either, is she? I love where this is going if he still does care for Sherrie in his heart. Real love trumps all the opinions given by all the commenters on this site. Makes me wonder if they ever have felt such...

How long you going to wait to spring the silly ass two roommates details on us - if we are still around for that long?

And always will be. 5* of course.

Obviously his kids and she was going to say "I'm pregnant" at end of part one.

a rhino horn up the backside.

Glad this story will come to an end, so fucking one sided(female) he cant be happy without her...ooouuu who is that? could it be set up any more fucking easier, shit how can this be considered good writing?.

The author did a good job of explaining her fall from grace. She liked the dirty excitement of it all. That is more plausible than "I was drunk, and angry at you, the bright lights" *****

While I understand Karen's reluctance to go against Sherrie's "ghost", I don't understand her breaking up with him without giving him a chance to "exorcise" it.

I commented, after part 1, that the story was finished. My thinking was that Sherrie's cheating had been so terrible that there was no chance in hell for a reconciliation. So I guess Sherrie's two roommates were conceived on their last night together. And he almost refused to perform.

Thanks for the offering. Five stars.

"Well...that's what I thought, but after a while it was clear the girl was absolutely overwhelmed, totally ashamed of what she'd done with that man in Vegas and more ashamed of seeing him after she came home."

Yep, you bet. So fucking ashamed she continued to spread her legs and give him the easy mark, the big fucking hairy infected hole between her legs. The one she was sharing with her husband so she could knowingly infect him with any sort of the clap and HIV. Fuck, so ashamed................

Sherrie finally came to light on what she had done and hates herself for it. being child like and than growing up has made her realize that the best thing she had she took for granet and threw it away.

Ron

Everyone knows that unlike the rest of us, if a woman cheats on her husband, she can never change. As long as she doesn't cheat, she is in the same space time continuum as anyone else and is able to regret the poor choices she's made, and make better choices going forward. But should she commit adultery, she goes into some kind of stasis and is locked out of normal time and space; unable to change from that point on. Ok, it doesn't sound plausible, but everyone knows "Once a cheater, always a cheater". I mean I must have read that at least a million times since finding this site. I can't claim to understand it and I sure as hell can't explain it; I'm just glad that I've been able to learn from my dumb ass, immature, self-centered choices and grow up!

I don't know why Melissa had mixed feelings about seeing Ron in love with Karen.

She herself was upset at Sherrie's actions, why would she expect Ron not to move on?

And Sherrie - she sees her DIVORCED husband DANCING with another woman, and THAT lets her know how her husband felt seeing another man's hands up her dress? There is NO comparison!

If he re-marries Sherrie, he validates Karen's doubts about them.

If/when he marries someone else, Karen will realize what she threw away.

it looks like Sherrie is going to get him back. I really hope not, was holding out for this writer to have a conscience and not go all "cuck is ok" on us. Time will tell. Good writer, good story. I just don't see how the man he created in this story would nut up and bend over. Like I said after the first installment, he should have dumped the friends too. Gonna cause him a lot of problems.

Losing points as we go forward. Down to 3 stars. Hope it doesn't go to 1.

YOU NEVER KNOW WHAT IS HIDDEN IN YOUR MIND JUST WAITING TO GET OUT. SURE SHERRIE WAS WRONG ACTING LIKE A SPOILED BRAT BUT I DO THINK SHE STILL LOVES HIM AND I FEEL THAT RON STILL LOVES HER. very good story and Karen knows something that she refuses to give up to Ron.

RON TEXAS cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

I haven't read chapter 3 yet but the cryptic, Sherrie's two roommates remark leads me to believe that the last night Sherrie and Ron spent together, resulted in pregnancy (a set of twins). I better be wrong and they had better be two damned cats or dogs! As for their last sexual romp. Unless I missed something, who eats a whore's snatch! Caresses her breasts to arouse her? Plays with her clit? I thought Ron was going to treat Sherrie like the skanky whore she was. Who cares about making sure a whore has multiple orgasms? Did I miss a part where he changed his mind and was going to give the cheating slut the best sex of her life as a last hurrah? I skipped the entire descriptive scene of Sherri and. Ron's last night of sex because I wouldn't have touched that cunt's body with ANY emotion resembling love. Hell, not even f-ing like! If those roommates turn out to be babies then his fake ass friends and Sherrie deserve a bullet to the f-ing forehead! If he winds up with Sherrie in chapter 3 his ass is grass because I'm loading my literary shotgun right now to blast a hole between his punk ass eyes and then I'm reloading it because the space between your eyes is next.

It seems that Sherrie has grown up and really sees what her betrayal has cost her. Has she learned anything from this yes she lost no discarded the best thing to happen to her.

My thoughts on Karen is that she loved Ron but not enough to fight for him.

Ron I think loved both Karen and Sherrie but Sherrie was the only one willing to fight to get him back in her life.

Ron. Texas

I sense that a real great 1st chapter gave way to this 2nd chapter that is about reconciliation. I like longer stories but this story should have ended after the 1st chapter. I have a real bad feeling about chapter 3. This ex wife does not deserve reconciliation....We'll see.

Reconciliation at all costs. I'll continue to read but, I'm not impressed.

But nothing she does will change what she DID! Even though it seems like she's had his kids (no direct mention but enough clues) there is no reason to ever consider taking her back. And this guy is a dummy. He should never be dating people he works with. That's Company Policy 101. If you let them reconcile you are going to get bombed.

The author has developed quite a bit of general skill as a writer. As usual with the better offerings on Lit there is plenty to like. Conversations flow well, as does the action from scene to scene (at least until the ponderous Afgahnistan debacle).

The sex scenes were good, if somewhat overdone, even superhuman at times. Does a woman really ride her guy for an hour, though? That was thrown out like it was their normal thing. Among all of the three or four couplings during each of their sex romps she jumps up and rides him for an hour. An hour, really? Maybe once in a while there would be a really long screw, but when she gets on top to warm up a bit it's an hour? That's gotta be a pretty raw pussy she has there. At least he isn't circumsized. Bet you missed that. I mean they are young and all horny, but hours and hours and all night screws with a typical American cut cock would be brutal on a girl's poor pussy. Thanks, Dr. Lifschitz!

At any rate, Karen's part in it is enjoyable. She definitely has fun, but she is also a little impish, too. It gives their interactions variety and depth. Well done.

That in itself is why there was so much disappointment to be felt when our protagonist allows the whole thing to go off the rails. So, the new sexed-up acrobat girlfriend, who is as hot and also as hot a fuck as you could ever expect to find, has a half-baked excuse from Psychology 101 that preempts marriage and that's how they leave it when he jets off to Afganistan?

He's already been with the girlfriend a long time and the marriage issue has, inexplicably, only now breached the surface. Yet, she seems very willing to marry as long as they work through this tenuously posited problem - the ghost of his ex-wife. My feelings right away were, what the fuck, he doesn't have to go to Crappistan. He can bag himself a perfect trophy wife who is actually the real thing. He could dump that job and work it out with her. What civilian job expects a guy to work in a war zone anyway?

The point is that after all of the absolutely unnecessary and ponderous events of the Afghanistan sequence he gets back and the girlfriend gets one or two lines and that's it? Oh, it's over. No clarification on her insight into his relationship with the ex. No background or foreground, or anything. Poof!

That really was inexcusable and wrecks the story. Maybe the relationship was all sex and would not survive the rigors of regular everyday life. But that was rather abrupt. And the psychological pseudo-explanation was rather stupid and patently unsupported.

Well, I'll eat my words if he doesn't get back with his dipshit cheatin' wife, but this whole thing screams reconciliation. She was a stupid self-absorbed long-time cheater, but now it's recon time? Well, he ate her trashed and cum filled pussy before, right? Don't tell me he didn't gobble a few swimmers in there.

I just don't see what the point is. Like the commenter remarked previously, if the ex has concealed children from the husband's goodbye fuckfest then Heaven help her. That would be beyond egregious.

I hope this isnt going where I think its going.

Lots of detail, lives going on ..... but Sherrie isnt dating.

They cant get back together ..... can they ?

it is best to get back up and on ASAP. TK U MLJ LV NV

Thanks for the effort.

Really good story. Something happened while he was in the hospital that Karen could not or would not get over so they went there separate ways which made Ron unhappy and troubled.

Ron/ cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Why is it every guy in these stories has a big cock? I thought the average size was 5-6 inches, I guess none of these guys are average at all. Another sore point in a lot of these stories is.....all of a sudden they did this or that but never had time for their wife and we're working all the time. For example: He took dance lessons, he started back with his flying lessons, he is a crack shot with a rifle because of the many times he went hunting I guess and on top of all this he is a fucking fantastic lover...geez when did he find time to work...but he can't stop his wife from fucking around and his great friends, one just like a sister won't tell him that his wife is screwing around behind his back.. This guy is just too unbelievable!!! In my opinion it causes the story to become kinda lame. I figure in the next chapter he is going to become a gold gloves champion from his college days or something else that is just as silly.

Clearly getting ready to sell out Part 1 and have a reconciliation. Why you believe a person in his shoes would stand to remain friends with Melissa and Cal is beyond me. They should be the second people on the "Forever Dead to Me" list after Sherrie.

First, Melissa and Cal don't tell him about her screwing around in Vegas, then for over four years they do not tell him he has children. Same goes double for treacherous wife. If not for his transfer, would they ever have told him.

To intentionally keep a man from his children is worse than the infidelity!!!!!

Hey Longhorn, the men in your stories sure are forgiving. I figure Sherrie's "roommates" are kids, right? If so, I'm guessing you'll have them be Ron's kids to help move the recon along. I'm just curious as to why you even wrote a recon into the story. Why not let the cheating skank fade away into the background? You wrote in a nice lady for him (Karen), then wrote her out in just a few sentences - we still don't really know why unless she heard about Ron's babies.

Can't imagine why you thought Sherrie was such a good person that you would move heaven and earth just to bring her back. Oh well. You're an excellent writer and I'll keep reading as long as you keep submitting them. I gave this one 5 stars, but I'll probably rate the next one a little lower since (If I'm right) you're planning on moving him back in with the ho. Thanks for the story.

Until I read the rest of it. If there's any kind of reconciliation, this entire debacle gets a big 1*.

Why is he still talking to people who kept it a secret is beyond me. Just tell the bitch in Vegas if you go with him I will tell your husband. I told a buddy one time if he fucked this girl while we were on a trip that I would rat him out. He did not do it and thanked me a few years later. This story looks like RAAC.

Why would Ron still be hanging out with the same people who hid the Vegas affair? And now they are hiding what are obviously his kids. Melissa says he is like a brother; obviously that is a bunch of BS. You don't do that to family or good friends.

Sherrie loves Ron so much but couldn't keep from lying and cheating over and over. The excuses she gave are terrible. The only real excuse is that she is a selfish person who does not love her husband. Oh, maybe she does feel something like real love now, now that she has his kids , and now that she lost him by driving him away, but how in the hell can Ron trust her.

I see a reconciliation in the future. And that's sad. Ron hit most of the points why it should be over at the end of the first chapter but I see him accepting his conniving, selfish, lying, distrustful, disrespectful ex-wife and friends back into his life.

Just pathetic.

Some people do stupid things for the wrong reasons. It sometimes takes something tragic to happen to them to realise how they truly messed up there life and marriage. It's called growing up and understanding that what you had was better than what you threw it away fôr. 5* read numerous times.

Ron/ cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

A lot of words strung together well, but a silly plot that does not follow human nature well at all, and thus provides a disjointed unsatisfactory story.

Very well-done description of Ron's time in the War-Zone but,the stink of a return to that cheating cunt,Sherrie,surfaced at this chapter's end.

It's gonna suck,if you fuck,that EX named Sherrie who made you a cuck! Once a cheater,always a cheater!

Chapter 3 is a Shit-Storm on the horizon! I see a 1 rating coming!

Sellout time begins 1*

Still five stars.

Also, the most common pistol cartridge in the world is 9mm, so how come the Afghani had a .45 ACP pistol? Possible, but the leftover Russian weapons would have been 9mm, and most pistols from the Pakistani Army would be 9mm as well.

I think Melissa was a shitty friend to him when she without even asking, showed all their correspondence to the ex. Not nice.

Melissa's POV and Karen's claim, that doesn't really seem to be substantiated, smells of heading towards an RAAC ending, hopefully I'm wrong, those 'roommates' that has so transparently been alluded to will probably lead to the protagonist making a few stupid decisions, like taking back the ex, thereby returning to the past, instead of moving on.

After the way Karen threw her self at Ron at the start ,it is highly unlikely she would have misgivings that he still felt some thing for Karen

I liked the shift of storyteller and the action parts were well written.

What an intriguing continuation. Especially liked the writing genius way Melissa's POV gave glimpses of home.

Don't see how the Afghanistan interlude advanced the story other than to make our hero more hero. It was the most captivatingly interesting part of Pt. 02, though.

I still don't get Karen's mentality. Kinda feels like the author, after painting her as a wonderful (adorable?) person, is shoving her aside without enough explanation to make room for Sherrie. OK by me -- I love reconciliation stories. That would mean Sherrie has changed. SplitAces on 9-26-14 writes shrewd piece blasting the idea that people can't change.

Onward with a great story.

Paul in Oklahoma

fucks him the first day she meets him, becomes exclusive with him, professes mutual love but doesn't think she has his whole heart and can apparently read his mind about his ex. Hmmm. Women.

Should he have cut Melissa and Cal loose when he found out they were telling his ex about him and vice versa?

Were I him I would have found Karen's position annoying. Leaving him because she knew his head better than he did? WTF. I'd have argued the point but for the fact I'd have sick of hearing her reasoning.

Damn good story.

Don't like where I think this is going!

Where Karen dumped him. His hesitancy to ask her to marry him sounded like an excuse on his part to cover up the fact that he really loved her. Karen's comments about a ghost in his life was just a pissy excuse to brush him off. With keeping his ex-wife in the story this looks to be heading in a sucky direction. PLEASE DON'T DO THIS! This story was great right up to the end where he was dumped and is heading back. It lost a star for trying to make the means justify the ending.

but seems to be headed for RAAC !After only 4years of marriage, Sherrie could spend a weekend with a lover and then continue the affair for several months until caught, while continuing to sleep with her husband. What will she do in 10, 15,20 years?! Cheaters are cheaters! This chapter definitely gets 5 stars, though sadly, Karen has been pushed out!

I know where this is headed. It's plain as day what's going to happen next, which is why Karen was unceremoniously discarded like someone hitting the backspace button repeatedly on their keyboard. RAAC. I'm out, and won't be reading the next chapter, sorry.

Cal and Melissa love him enough to name their kid after him but not enough to tell his wife cheated on him and yet they are still his best friend? Clearly he's a clueless chump.

to have around in a firefight thought.

I'm having difficulty understanding why Melissa remains a part of the MC's life. Either she was his friend and she deeply betrayed him by helping keep the affair concealed, or she was truly just his wife's friend, in which case why would he want to keep in contact with her?

She basically just serves to prove that he hasn't really gotten over his ex-wife, keep the ex-wife still something that exists in his life, and provide an opportunity for RAAC.

Karen wasn't wrong. If he was truly over Sherrie, he wouldn't have kept in weekly contact with her best friend.

I used to believe in it, very foolishly when I was young.

I can literally explain every action with a more plausible explanation.

Is the ex-husband unable to love another? Is he not giving himself completely to another? No.

Why isn't he proposing to his new girlfriend? How about he's shy? How about he's cynical? How about he's that unsure about EVERYTHING. He had once believed in true love. He believed his ex-wife was his partner in everything. That lie was shattered, his entire worldview is GONE. Poof. Why can't his new lover propose to him? He'd say YES. Maybe she's too old-fashioned. Maybe she's insecure. Are we seeing a pattern? These are normal people, with average emotions. They are both mentally blocked from moving forward not because of 'star-crossed lovers', but rather their own mental prisons. They absolutely refuse to just grow up. Meditate on their blocks, and communicate them reasonably with eachother. His lover wont even entertain the notion it could be anything BUT old love. It's dogmatic.

The ex-wife COULD be holding out for true love's kiss. Swoon. Or maybe she's broken? Maybe she's re-evaluating her life. Maybe she wants to grow as an individual, and no rebound for an emotional crutch? Maybe she's gun-shy about accidentally cheating again. Maybe she's afraid she'll be cheated on? These are super boring and average reasons to explain away her monk lifestyle. Average, but nuanced and relate-able.

But true love? That shit is fairy tales. My love life became....GOOD....STABLE....DEEPER, but only after I ditched the idea of true love. Don't get me wrong. It's actually believable that three people would stagnate and suffer because they all became convinced about this myth. I was a sucker, as many people were. There are 7 billion people and counting on Earth. We have so many chances to find an attractive mate with compatible personalities, and even a handful of chances to test that in courtship. So my complaint isn't at all that they all believe it, the thing that bothers me is NO ONE seems to be cynical about it. It's just accepted as fact. Ex-husband could be in an ever deepening relationship if they gave eachother a real chance. The ex-wife could find love again after proving to herself she's worth a chance, proving she's grown without a relationship crutch.

It is garbage for Karen to say Ron is holding back.It is obvious that he is madly in love with her and if she thought that why did she stay with him all that time.Tha author is looking for a get out for for Ron to get back with Melissa and struggling to find one.

but Karen was always a dead end as most women who fuck you day one usually are.

clued Karen in about the kids he didn't know existed. And she didn't tell him. Drop kick that bitch and his married couple friends out of his life for that reason as well.

"Well...that's what I thought, but after a while it was clear the girl was absolutely overwhelmed, totally ashamed of what she'd done with that man in Vegas and more ashamed of seeing him after she came home." - I HAVE to agree with your comment that if she was SO "overwhelmed, totally ashamed" of what she did in Vegas. then she. literally would have killed the asshole if he so much as touched her again.

I'm not going to go back to check but I don't recall anyone actually saying Sherrie's roommates are Ron's children. Could be fuckwads but I doubt it. I expect they will be Ron's leading to oh, hell we all know where. I would have had a very serious "talk" with Melissa and her husband about keeping the Vegas secret. Then when I found out she was passing info on to Sherrie that would have ended that relationship but good. As for someone's comment about where the old man could come up with a .45 ACP, there's a reason it was named a 1911, a version's been around for over 100 years. I'll take my A1 over a 9mm any day, any week, any year. If I can't stop'em with a combination of 7 rounds of military ball and hollow points I've always had at least one more full mag. That puppy was designed for snap shooting and stopping any bad guys literally dead in their tracks. The damned thing is nearly indestructible unlike anything it hits. Good story LH, I enjoyed the hell out of it no matter what anyone else says. Signed: BTW

american. an old afghani wants to keep usa assholes out of his country, and you call him a terrorist. a brainwashed good ole boy. you make me puke.

Refreshing story!!! I just hope he doesn't become a CUCK in the final chapter!!!

US invaders in Afghanistan. Afghan patriots called terrorists by this author. Yechhh, loser!

How is it that so many of your characters are executives 5 years out of college?

Anyway, I thoroughly enjoy your writing.

Bald girl hair woman!!!

I see authors and others comments on same issue. So!!

USMC Vietnam.

Except for guard duty etc can not wear cover,(hat) inside. Without cover no salutes!

Most stories get it wrong. Ex-wife got mad at me cause yell every time some show that screwed up showing cover on inside or gasp salutes inside!

Picky?! jtwheels

Good story.

Great story, a little new love, then no love, then a little drama, can't wait to what is next.

Why I'd Karen thought his heart was elsewhere,did she enter into a long term relationship?.Also what would difference would a piece of paper make to their relationship?.

Are we supposed to be so stupid we can't work out the "room mates" are children? I'm going to guess they are twins :). My crystal ball tells me there will be a reconciliation. Because as we all know being cock mad is only a temporary condition, brought on by women's things. Hormones possibly. Weirdly men are totally the opposite in my experience. Once a pussy hound, always a pussy hound. Even into their late 60's and after a couple of divorces, they can't stop.

Where to start? Sherrie is described as having barely B-cup sized breasts by our 'hero.' Karen, considerably larger ones. Melissa complains in her diary that when Sherrie gains back some of the weight she lost while being depressed, her breasts were much larger than hers, despite her having had several children. Sounds like the author forgot what he already wrote in the midst of thousands of wasted words and details that are most inaccurate about various topics. Then, he spends so many pages on Karen, including needlessly clinical medical terms for misplaced parts of her anatomy, only to have her break up with him without even bothering to give a decent explanation. Never mind the dozen or so flaws in the military aspects of this part of the story. Now, just when it seemed he was on the verge of recovering from his whore, all the telltale warning scents of RAAC shit start to appear. Very little hope for part 3 at this point.

Lovely follow up.

Interesting & looking for the conclusion.

Maybe the room mates ought to have been kept a secret.

Good story, I can't see him getting back with the ex but the story seems to be leading that way. How a guy can accept and ignore that kind of cheating is not understandable but who can explain love, if that's what it is. The writing is good the criticisms are picky and are a based on and old axiom: "It's easy to criticize, that's why everyone does it." The story is well written and fun to read and comes from inside the author. Read and enjoy, if you don't like it, don't read it! Beside, it's free! Maybe you could ask for your money back! (That makes as much sense as much as some of the criticism, right?)

This is how to write a reconciliation story. You have to give it time and show growth in the offender. The cheated spouse needs to have time to put things in perspective. I wish we had more stories like this. Thanks for your work.

reasonable man

I really love how you wrote this and I had to come back after finishing the story to say again how I enjoyed it!

He still 'loves' her after all she did?? AYSM?

Damn you write e exceptionally!! Perfect intrigue. Love the filler from Mellisa’s diary. Super dialog. Nice suspense The medal was priceless. Hate the Karen breakup but realize it was inevitable given the end of part one. It’s coming but I don’t care I have reconciled myself to it and actually hope it comes to fruition.

Great storytelling. Thank you for letting me enjoy. John

Roommates huh? Yeah right twins is my guess that she has so far not told him she has. Wonder if they are his are the asswipe’s? My guess his given Melissa still being in her life. She is so messed up. However, unlike my comment in an earlier part of this story I think she finally understands what true love is and the hurt that betrayal like hers causes. Too little too late. Wonder if we will learn what revelation tipped Karen’s decision to breakup with him? Does she know who the roommates are? Got me hooked I am gonna read to see this unfold. Perfect storytelling!!! I am enthralled and eager to read more. Writing is good but the tension, suspense, intrigue, adventure, surprise is fantastic. Hate Karen could not continue with him. Ron deserved her but not if he was gonna resent her sometime in the future. Karen is a gem. So is Melissa.

Yep I can see the reconciliation attempt unfolding. The joker here is the roommates and Ron’s response. Thanks for sharing. John

Yes, it's hard.

I appreciate the respect you have shown us in this chapter. Every marine can understand the loss of a group of marines from a sacrificial bomber and I winced through the entire paragraph. But if I find out he goes back to his cheating wife I will give you 1 star and never read your stories again.