Loved your descriptions of these two beauties - Very sensual and detailed! Can't wait to read more!
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Anonymous07/29/05
Interesting
Not a big fan of Lesbian scenes... but your description of her getting dressed was very well done. Still curious as to why her Father didn't join in, or why that wasn't revealed.
Also... he must be /very/ hard on his actors... she went from 19 to 22 in like one paragraph. :)
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Anonymous09/23/05
How old is she really?
At the beginning, you say that she's 19. Two paragraphs later she's 22. How old is she?
Yes there is a matter of detail, but I have done the same in one of my stories and had to retract and change it. BUT as so many readers told me, 'who cares?' There are whole nations in the world where ages are approximate, so why bother at all to be so pedantic about it? Loved the sex play, if guessed the plot line. P. Grimm
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Anonymous07/28/11
sooo wet...
after reading this i got out my vibeoratot! it made my pussy so wet. i long for the day when i get a chance to eat some wet pussy. rry
English
Interesting....
.....and that's about all I have to say, so far. More, please?
Very Sexy!
Loved your descriptions of these two beauties - Very sensual and detailed! Can't wait to read more!
Interesting
Not a big fan of Lesbian scenes... but your description of her getting dressed was very well done. Still curious as to why her Father didn't join in, or why that wasn't revealed.
Also... he must be /very/ hard on his actors... she went from 19 to 22 in like one paragraph. :)
How old is she really?
At the beginning, you say that she's 19. Two paragraphs later she's 22. How old is she?
Nicely written
Very sexy story, shame you never wrote a sequel - I'd have loved to see Dad join in...
stuff her age...just fuck her
Yes there is a matter of detail, but I have done the same in one of my stories and had to retract and change it. BUT as so many readers told me, 'who cares?' There are whole nations in the world where ages are approximate, so why bother at all to be so pedantic about it? Loved the sex play, if guessed the plot line. P. Grimm
sooo wet...
after reading this i got out my vibeoratot! it made my pussy so wet. i long for the day when i get a chance to eat some wet pussy. rry
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