All Comments on 'Shagged Drunk Mother'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Crude

... nothing more.

Stan

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
I have to agree..definitely crude

Any son that gets his mother drunk (when she doesn't drink)-- just so he can fuck her-- ought to be disowned and then prosecuted. The author says this is a true story but I believe it is just the result of an overactive imagination.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Aware

After one drink mom was not so drunk she did not know what was going on. She could have stopped her son at anytime she wanted to, but instead she swallowed his cum, slept nude with him, cried in the morning then spent the next four days fucking. I liked the story and hope it was true. I do think mom will be back. S

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
TRASH

Enuff said

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Shite

Not very well written at all.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Not too good

The story was not a turn on. You need to develop it more. Too boring.

toJohnny7toJohnny7over 18 years ago
Glad to hear your story!

Thanks for sharing your true story. I liked it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Well now!!!

It sounds a whole lot like "date Rape" to me. She was drunk for cripes sakes, you more or less Raped your own mom.....

Paul

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TrollyTrollyover 18 years ago
From Under the Bridge

Crapola. Story and technique. Don't bother, anymore.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
almost indescribable

this is the poorest example of writing i have ever seen in print. incomplete sentences...chages of tense and nothing but short words. itsalmost like a third grader who knows dirty words blabbing them out, almost incoherently. i wonder if the author ever spent a day in school.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
After

After I saw that worthless piece of feces Anon Stan took a dump on your story, I gave it a 5. Stan is a worthless jackoff with carpel tunnel.

mrpervy46mrpervy46over 18 years ago
very well done

Just tell the other dim-watts to piss off. The story was marked incest, that should have clued ,all the "walking Blonde Moments",as to what kind of story it was and moved on. Good story keep writting and never mind those bozos.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
What a load of CRAP

To say the english is very poor is being kind.

Erotic? No way was any way near erotic, just very sad!

If I was you I would hang my head in shame.

Please, please DO NOT WRITE ANY MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Uhm....

Sorry,

You submitted a first draft. That's a no, no. Polish your work or get a Literotica editor to help you.

Next time, don't be in such a rush for fame.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
yeah, yeah, Sure! Really tacky

un real

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
a beginning

Every writer needs a beginning. What separates a good writer from the okay ones is that the good ones keep writing and rectify thei mistakes. All of those people that had something bad to say would do well to remember that. Keep writing and submitting your work. Pay attention to detail and let your mind soar. You did not do to badly for what looks like your fist story. Keep writing. This is only a beggining.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
How bad did this suck ass?!

This story had some great potential, and was very poorly executed. while some are right about tenses they did get in the way. and sentences where readable and some misspelled words. but in an over all i didnt get horney AT ALL. go back over the story read it over, and over, and over, and over. until it flows. have poeple edit it. i like the story. put the grammer and execution got in the way. its to bad. please take the poeples advise and edit it. it will not only help the flow, but may also turn it into more of an erotic tale and not just a fuck story where the mom feals sorry for her sun. if i where u id be trying to get her forgiveness. becuase if this realy did happen u really suck. not becuase u fucked ur own mother but becuase u didnt try and love her. its a great pitty u dont have more respect for women it gets u a HELL A LOT MORE the just a fuck trophy. please learn from this. other wise u really do suck.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Mixed feelings

I seriously hope you lied when you said this was a true story. If it WAS true, then I agree that you took advantage of your mom. Not only did you take advantage of her, but you damaged your relationship.

For these purposes, I'm going to do something I don't do very often. I'm going to pretend this was a work of fiction and say this: You did submit what is the equivalent of a first draft. Always have someone edit your work before you submit it. You showed some potential in your writing. If you keep writing, try to remember these important facts:

-character development is key, it allows the reader to feel like they're in the story

-descriptive imagery helps, makes everything seem more real

-dialogue is very important to show what is going on in people's minds

-GET AN EDITOR to check your work

(P.S. If you did in fact write a true story, I think you should try to make amends to your mother. Not only did you take advantage of her, but you forced her to cheat on your father. This is something she may not have been willing to do. Remember, you are NOT dealing from a position of strength. Family is the most important thing in the world. Make things right.)

SmokeEaterSmokeEaterover 17 years ago
Poor effort

Sorry, but this story sucks. And not just the mechanics, like syntax and grammar, but in its very structure. There's no focus, no continuity, nothing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Wow!!!!

Absolute f*cking Arse Gravy!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
loved it....

loved it very very much... was very arousing... hope she comes back and we get another story :D

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago

HOT HOT HOT!!!!!!

ancientagentancientagentalmost 12 years ago
One lucky guy

If this story is true and I hope it is you are one lucky guy. I"m sure when you finally get back to the States, your mum will find time for your cock. Great story. Keep writing Bro. Add to the story like when you did get back to mummy.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
looking for fun ;)

Im 19 m kik me at Josh_Todd93 girls only over 18 thank u

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Willingly mom

The first time I fucked my mom was when I was 13 and she 30. That was 3 years ago. Since then we use to fuck at least three times a week, and in which she begs me everytime to fill her cunt with my cum. This morning after our usual fuck, she gave me the news that she is three months pregnant from me.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
excellent story please write more

Excellent

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

Very nice ! I am happy for both of you and I think your mom deep down inside liked it but taking time to settle with the reality. It all be alright soon.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Shagged Drunk

I AM MRS DOLLA BAJPAI I AM HOUSE WIFE MY HUSBAND DOSN,T FUCK ME AT ALL I AM REALLEY HUNGRY OF FUCKING I CAN'T CONTROL MY SELF OF GETTING FUCKED HARD FROM ANY ONE SO I AM SAGGED I KEEP BIT TIPSY FROM ANY MATRIAL LIKE ALCOHOLIC DRUGS AND MANY OTHER SO PLEASE HOLD MY HAND AND FUCK ME HARD.

E MAIL dolla _tata1@rediffmail.com

by dolla bajpai

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago

Naistele viin mõjub,kohe ajavad jalad laiali ükskõik kelle ees.Mäletan,et kooliajal tahtsin ka hirmsasti oma ema proovida.Emaga vaidlesime terve aasta selle üle,et poeg ei tohi emaga sellist asja teha.Saabus vanaaasta lõpupidu,kus sai ka alkoholi võetud,siis sain ka ema voodisse meelitada.Voodis oli ema väga vastuvõtlik minuga,suudlesin teda kohe suule,mis võttis ema oigama,siis tirisin tal püksid maha ja paitasin ta väga karvast vittu.Ema vingerdas voodis,kui teda pikalt jälle suudlesin.Järsku ma keerasin ringi ja hakkasin emal vittu lakkuma ja ta samal ajal tõmbas minu munni omale suhu.Nikkusime mitu tundi,ning vahepeal käisid meie naabrid ukse taga küsimas,et kas me tuleme varsti pidulauda tagasi.Siis oli juba uus aasta kui me saabusime pidulauda.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Ema külastus

Ma olin 23.aastane ja viibisin peksmise eest 3.aastat vanglas.Kahe aasta pärast ema külastas mind vanglas,sain kolmeks päevaks privaattoa ja olin emaga koos seal.Viimasel õhtul ma suudlesin ema,mis erutas teda väga,et ajas kohe omal püksid maha.Terve viimase öö me nikkusime mitmes asendis ja lõpuks ma käskisin ema,et ta pissiks veel minu peale.See võttis veenmist ning lõpuks ta ikka kusi minu peale.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
My son is in school

I love the idea, not sure I could do it but next time I visit him I’ll be thinking of your story. KC

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Hey

This shit is trash, add more dirty talk, and more detail, >:( and make the son more forcefull, lol but if this is how you really fuck that's a shame...you didn't even make her cum, tsk tsk.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago

To me it was more of a rape then anything else. The story was sloppy and was written to quick to me it needed more detail.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

I thought this story was awesome!!!! Your descriptions seemed very real.

There are many who made stupid posts indicating poor writing I think those

guys were jealous assholes.

I thought it was written well enough to convey an erotic sexy story man.

Like I said it seemed very real. Did you and your mother ever hook up again?

Would love to read Part 2.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Great story man keep up the good work ,,,,,ill be looking for more from you ...Thanks

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