Cuckolding from a Woman's View

Slippery slop

The story was told from an intesting point of view, and told well. The effect was somewhat spoiled by the many, many spelling and grammar errors.

One I especially enjoyed was "slippery slop". That one worked for me, even in context, although I suspect that the author really meant to say "slippery slope".

OMG What an erotic story this is starting to be

Loved it, great point of view too. A woman sees her sisters being fucked by a man while her husband watches. It's a new twist to an old story and it's HOT HOT HOT!

Hey your back

Just wanted to say welcome back, and a great story so far

Fair odds.

Two out of three sisters with a clue ain't bad.

Editing

you really need someone to proofread your stories before you submit them, or learn to do it yourself.

who gives a f about the errors

Who gives a fuck about a few errors. Wonderful story, can't wait to see it develop! Are we going to eventually see the sisters watching from the closet then cleaning Jan up before joining in the action and eventually ending up with all three husbands bound & having to watch three (or more) big black cocks enjoyed by the sisters

Good story, bad grammar

Yes, I agree with the "slippery slop" comment (lol). I also like the cheerleading (yea, yea, yea probably should have been yeah, yeah, yeah) and the comment about the guy being covered with "scares"; could that have been "scars"?

Just clean it up and keep writing.

Good, but could have been better

Altho future action(s) sound promissing on this story, there was not enough action to grade here. Maybe future chapters will be better?

Liked it

We liked it so far now on to the next.....Julie & Mark

Good start

let's see where this goes.

Nice beginning.

Would be good if it ended NOW !! Absolutely worthless and inept.

Give it up

"She laughed and said; "He told me he had a hunk of nigger meat between his legs for my white ass." This is the most disgusting and insulting piece of writing I've ever seen on this site. "Watch out! Black boy gonna get yo momma! Crude shit. Get lost.

Had to agree - this one was dog-shit. Reminds the fags of that wimp Wedjat's fetishes.

It sucks!

Actually this was well done

I'm not a fan of cuckold stories at all. The only reason I even looked at this story was the fact that it piqued my curiosity. I'm sure I'm going to hate futures chapters of this and will most likely stop reading it around chapter 3 but this chapter was well done and very believable.

Predictable trolls crying racist. Good story- edit it tho pls

I know how yawnish editing can be. But it does distract.
Racist? I don't feel that quoting conversation makes you, or your character necessarily racist, and the forbidden language and white woman superiority etc attitude, IN CONTEXT, are designed to arouse. That's the whole point.
Having said that, you could improve it by a bit of dialogue between the women to the end that they don't condone racism outside bedroom stimulation.
Maybe it is still wrong, but it's probably realistic bedroom talk.
Where is the material that these ANONYMOUS critics have published?
Dirty nasty forbidden outrageous talk is what sites like this are for...
Learn to read. The author did warn you. Log out and go find a site for the self righteous.