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Smouldering
You have a real gift
for descriptive writing
RF, and your erotic pieces
sizzle! Keep up the good
work my friend, you just
keep getting better.
~ Jenn
Utopias Peaks
I love the feeling you made here.Smokey haze smoldering and utopia's peaks really so vividly put you right in the haze. Great, thanks
very nice
fairy girl.
i like reading you more,
the more that you write.
it just keeps getting better.
love. the. short lines.
seriously.
4°
exo!!!
nice and smooth like a tequila sunrise going down......loved the word combinations......don
some great lines!
"slides
down cherry, kissed skin.
puddling down the carpet
below."
and
"pink thong rides high,
on saw horse hips."
Another nice one!
Tess
just love this phrase
uniting sonic bodies of heated
morphical mounds. smokey haze
has nice resonation qualities I enjoy reading...smiles/bluerains
I loved cherry
kissed skin and saw horse hips.
The line breaks threw me off a little as did some of the punctuation...all things that get better the more you write.
: )
I can see you getting better each time.
Keep at it
Mmmm...Cherry!
The second time I read, the more I liked it! Great description in your words...
~Honey
You know I love short lines.....
and the line breaks were quite effective!
Oh my!
what have I been missing? or who?
I do love this, beautiful work. Thank you.
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