Sounds like Jim didn't take kindly to Frank fingering his wife.
Wonder how many more women Frank calls a slut?? Without looking over his shoulder??
Although it got quite serious it was a fun story!!
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Anonymous08/18/05
A Fairly original Take On the Theme
Good story. Interesting. What is nice about this---nice? my God, such a word about this subject----you don't know what is coming (an o, not a u) next. That makes it an interesting story.
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Anonymous08/18/05
Good story!
Good story, not at all what I had expected.
Keep writing!
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Anonymous08/19/05
Nicely told
A good tale of one-up-manship. Sounds like Frank could take a lesson from the coyotes and glance over his shoulder once in a while to see what might be behind him. If he would have been taking care of business at home, his wife wouldn't be smiling at the memory of another mans fingers and kisses. I'm now wondering if he will ask his wife to supply any watersports in the future. Ha Ha
Yes, the story still needs editing. Keep looking, there are a lot of good editors out there.
This was one of my fisrt stories. I really liked it. Most comments said I need it edited, so I had it edited. May not be perfect but is a better read. Give it a chance.
Thank you DG Hear
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Anonymous10/09/05
A Good Read
I liked it, Husband was no wimp. That's the way it should be. I hate wimp endings where the husband just jacks off to his wife cheating.
Chicago
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Anonymous10/13/05
Interesting story
I went back to read some of your other stories and came across this one. It was good. Hey readers! give this one a try. You just might like it.A friend
I don't like Lit's rating mechanism. This wasn't a perfect story but it surely was a very good one. Not a 5, better than a 4, say 9 out of 10. Good quick reaction by hubby, no doubt about his leaning one way or the other. Good job.
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Anonymous10/28/05
Good Story
Liked your story, but your dialoge needs help from an editor. (like missing quote marks)
JimDinMN
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Anonymous07/22/10
Are you High
I generally like your stories and have had many a cum while reADEING THEM AND THIS ONE SUCK'S not even good but I will read your next one!
I just read this since you are one of my favorite authors. A good story, not great, but it reveals how much you have improved over the years. I also just read "Chocolate Covered Cherries" and it almost hard to believe that you are the same author. Goes to show that practice does make perfect.
Thanks for continuing to write.
The whole discovery scene was a bit surreal. I can't imagine anyone actually doing that after walking in on their wife in the throws of passion with another man. I got to hand it to you as being quite inventive. Thanks for the offering.
English
Yeah, I liked it
Sounds like Jim didn't take kindly to Frank fingering his wife.
Wonder how many more women Frank calls a slut?? Without looking over his shoulder??
Although it got quite serious it was a fun story!!
A Fairly original Take On the Theme
Good story. Interesting. What is nice about this---nice? my God, such a word about this subject----you don't know what is coming (an o, not a u) next. That makes it an interesting story.
Good story!
Good story, not at all what I had expected.
Keep writing!
Nicely told
A good tale of one-up-manship. Sounds like Frank could take a lesson from the coyotes and glance over his shoulder once in a while to see what might be behind him. If he would have been taking care of business at home, his wife wouldn't be smiling at the memory of another mans fingers and kisses. I'm now wondering if he will ask his wife to supply any watersports in the future. Ha Ha
Yes, the story still needs editing. Keep looking, there are a lot of good editors out there.
Keep writing, DG.
simply enjoyable
left me with a big smile.
You need an editor
I definitely think you need an editor, but I like your stories.
DG Hear
This was one of my fisrt stories. I really liked it. Most comments said I need it edited, so I had it edited. May not be perfect but is a better read. Give it a chance.
Thank you DG Hear
A Good Read
I liked it, Husband was no wimp. That's the way it should be. I hate wimp endings where the husband just jacks off to his wife cheating.
Chicago
Interesting story
I went back to read some of your other stories and came across this one. It was good. Hey readers! give this one a try. You just might like it.A friend
What rating?
I don't like Lit's rating mechanism. This wasn't a perfect story but it surely was a very good one. Not a 5, better than a 4, say 9 out of 10. Good quick reaction by hubby, no doubt about his leaning one way or the other. Good job.
Good Story
Liked your story, but your dialoge needs help from an editor. (like missing quote marks)
JimDinMN
Are you High
I generally like your stories and have had many a cum while reADEING THEM AND THIS ONE SUCK'S not even good but I will read your next one!
Good early effort
I just read this since you are one of my favorite authors. A good story, not great, but it reveals how much you have improved over the years. I also just read "Chocolate Covered Cherries" and it almost hard to believe that you are the same author. Goes to show that practice does make perfect.
Thanks for continuing to write.
Enjoyed it
The whole discovery scene was a bit surreal. I can't imagine anyone actually doing that after walking in on their wife in the throws of passion with another man. I got to hand it to you as being quite inventive. Thanks for the offering.
It is a good one
Early or not -
It read well and flowed just fine - the subsequent editing may be part of that but this version is just fine thank you -
good story
it was a good story. why is it that it takes a dramatization in events to show that true love(going to the grave love), is for always.
nothing like a bit of fantasy
to spice up you love life.....the trouble starts when fantasy becomes reality...then the shit hits the fan...a nice little tale....
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