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Very nicely done!
This is not an easy form to make look easy. ;)
It reads smoothly and the lines lead the theme through to completion.
I only find one line that slightly bothers me:
"my soul-there are no shadows there"
For some reason the hyphen and the double "there" catch my eye and ear.
Thank you for a most enjoyable read on a day full of good poems!
put together
quite nicely Bo...you made it look so easy...lol/bluerains
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"My soul-there are no shadows there." Is it suppose to be soul--there? That would give it a pause like: my soul. there are no shadows there. Or is it suppose to be a hyphenated word? Other than that one line of confusion, very good villy. :)
nice work Boo
I agree with blue, you
make it look so easy!
Lovely piece,
thanks.
~ Jenn
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Haunting whimsy here.. laced with memories knotted with gratitude and a wee bit of pain... very emotional and the style flows well.. you do make it look easy...both the style and the understanding of loving forgiveness of gratitude..
du~
Sweet
Nice poem. The repitition is subtler than it is in pantoum.Morning Memory flows smoothly in a difficult style.
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