by MrTwister2112
You obviously are a very talented writer.
More like this please
Definitely five stars. You could have strung this out, but loved it just as is.
Thanks for the smiles. Yes, those of us who have attended high school reunions later in time certainly realize how time has changed all of us. Some for the better and others, not so much.
A little too convenient and exaggerated for my taste, unfortunately. It's not well written, but I tend to find this kind of story works better if it's more grounded.
As a single 70+ male, I can get surprised and gratified in a real romance story. Two people finding themselves and each other beyond the real pain of loosing their life mate. In my opinion, life experiences are not a life sentence but are foundational for growth and brighter experiences. Well written. Very well expressed, and triggered my (almost dormant) enchantment in living the life we are given. Thank you.
... Of course, being a bliviot from the 70's, I'm slightly biased. Very nice.
.. perfect - but not quite!
I enjoyed the build up, story and sex (of course!) but a couple of tiny things. The flash-back scenes IMHO could have been a little better identified; there was at least one where I wasn't 100% sure what era Michael was in! The other seems to be peculiarly American - in the UK we do NOT shake our heads when we mean yes, we nod them. When I see "Shook her head yes" it confuses me for the second or two it takes me to convert. Not exactly life-changing or anything, just a nit-pick.
Thoroughly enjoyed it, thank you.
The story has potential but it rambles on too much. The dialogue also needs a lot of work. It was a good effort.
This is a great story. I think it lends itself to another chapter.
Great writing! Great story development and continuity! This story deserves a second chapter
burninglove
You wrote a very outstanding and realistic tale! You included the correct amount of eroticism which added tremendously to the tale.
A little too unrealistic that two ugly ducklings turned into swans, but a good romantic read nevertheless
Enjoyable yarn.
Got lost with the flitting in and out of the past or future or dream or wherever it went.
But for the main part good rnough to look out for more of your stories.