All Comments on 'She Gave Him Power'

start of a fun series

This is boring shit. Zero originality.

Woman is singular, women is plural. Please stop using women when you mean woman. Otherwise good start

Please continue

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Questions traditionally end with a question mark.

I’m not thus far impressed but it’s only the second paragraph.

Power? You mean like mind control..

How did he come to that conclusion? I thought power mean super strength, flight etc... You really need to learn to be more coherent! The concept it unorganized even for a fantasy story!

Basically this story is of to a good start. Idea, writing itself and sex scenes are very good.

The problems are the same as the others found:

- in one paragraph Beth becomes Jane

- women and woman mean different numbers

So perhaps get another proof reader for the next chapter. So long.

PS: when can we expect the next chapterS?

A womAn

Many womEn

One single womAn

Three womEn

How is it so fucking hard to get something so simple right?

This is off to a great start. Don't let the grammar police put you off, correct plurals don't get my engine going like it seems for them.

This is off to a really good start. All those who are criticising your grammar - tell them to go write a story and have it released - until then tell them to shut the fuck up.

It would be worth asking one of the volunteer editors to proofread your stuff before you release it though sometimes it can derail your chain of thought when something obvious is wrong with names and grammar.

of what? bad grammar? incompetency? bad spelling? or all combined?