Any heat this story was generating was doused by the errors.
Story content more than made up for any errors in writing this story.
I thought it was well written. The best part was karen taking charge and taking control from the perfect girl!!
This was an excellent story, yes there were a few minor grammatical errors, but it didn't bother me any. great story!
Awzome Written i did see some grammatical problems but its worth 5/5 *Ras*
Not sure who David was, but it ruined the moment trying to figure it out.
"Anything special you'd like to see baby?" Karen asked smiling as she stared at David's cock tenting his boxers toward the night sky.
- who the hell is David? Best not to change character names midway. Just a tip ;)
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