by annaswirls
The last strophe is excellent and creative. Lines like "our heavens are immeasurable" had me cringing, though! I think you manage to stay on the upside of syrupy, but be careful!
Fly
That is great, 'the moon follows us' it conveys such a powerful bond and emotion. Thanks
yea fly, I know that line sucks, I wanted to say something like
qualitative not quantative but einstein whacked me with his violin stick and he made me do it, I swear. and he is not sorry about it either.
thanks for the comments, love poetry is not easy for me.
thanks for being kind :)
this would be a masterpiece for many poets. for you, eh. lol It's not bad, though. "Our stars are for wishing not for counting" cute line. Stop writing cute!
Of all your submissions on these 2 pages, I like this one best. I resonates with me, and isn't that what poetry is supposed to do?
Thanks as