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by RhymeFairy08/03/05

Nice~

There are so many ways to express that all consuming Love. I think you did it well ~!! Nice poem here.

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by Anonymous08/03/05

The heart is in the right place...

...and the recurring structure is - or can be - a plus. I only wish there were some more concrete images, something that would engrave the poem in our minds. Souls on fire and bodies ablaze with passion are a dime a dozen in romanticly-driven poetry. I feel that if you steer away from that sort of clichés, there can be some real promise in here.

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