All Comments on 'You Dont Know What Love Is'

I can tell a lot of thought and time went into this well balanced write. I could argue a few points from where I am sitting, but as your description of your life... thanks for sharing. "Do I know what love is?" The feeling you have watching a rose grow thorns by a soul with deep feelings yearning passions touch.

There are some elements in this poem that indicate promise and that could be explored more in-depth. The spirit that drives it is certainly admirable, as is this sense of everyday life objects, relations and feelings being a reflect of something deeper and transcendental.

But I don't think the list structure was what this poem needed. As I started reading, I didn't need to go further than the first few lines to guess how it would develop, with more of the same until the very end. (The variation in the last few lines was a good idea, though.) I can't help but feel that the poem would have been all that much better if it didn't pay this much attention to what love *isn't* and more to what love *is* - and it wouldn't take much, either. Only one or two carefully chosen elements could be much more powerful than an endless row of laundry-list items.

You have a gold mine here and you overwhelm by trying to give it to me all at one time. Could have done a series, with a few related items carefully explored. The pattern also overwhelms

[ It's not sex,

it's cuddling ]

and becomes somewhat numbing. Trying something different, like

[ It's not sex,

buy cuddling ]

In short, when a good effort causes the reader to suggest how to make it better, that's a sign you've got a problem.