... about sounds. Seriously, it's a nice story but the women are acting like they are just warm bodies to fuck. I keep feeling like the character is using them to get his rocks off, and is not giving any pleasure in return. I remember only one time that you have mentioned that one of the girls have actually got off.
While a major point for me, that is the only concern that I have with a good story, with an interesting storyline. I can't wait to see where you go with this.
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Anonymous12/11/10
boom
Dude I cant get away from the story!!! excellent story!! this should be a BOOK!! haha.. i've never gotten past the porn in the past... this one i just want to read the story and find out what happens next!
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Anonymous04/05/11
Domination with a twist of compassion
M&S can be either a major theme or a background effect - Jack is obviously a dominator with enough compassion to keep the story from slipping into debauchery - a good combination of selfish passion from both Jack and Karen with a willing partner characterisation by passive Debbie - the stories in Literotica have a wide spectrum of themes and CvsN is just one example of a story a bit left of central
Right now I'm doing physical therapy, playing online chess and meandering through this story in no particular order. Your stories uplift my spirits. Thanks! Now for a little yoga and tidying up , then back to see how chapter 4 shakes out.
As usual TX well done. About to start reading chapter 4 hoping it is a good as the last three.
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Anonymous11/08/14
Unsympathetic protagonist
Congrats you've created a main character that is basically one giant testicle. Does this ass clown do anything non selfish? C'mon you're a better writer than this. The seesawing between his immoral actions and his syrupy words are stupid.
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Anonymous12/24/14
skull-nation23
I was a hero. I was a villain. I was a jerk. I was a fool. I was a genius. I was a male, letting his hormones run his life. I was a typical guy, letting the little head do all the thinking. " words to describe my life sadly i agree with the first comment but i must admit....im still intune so good work.
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Anonymous01/08/15
ANONYMOUS NUMBNUTS
nuff said
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Anonymous06/30/15
congratulations
Unlike a previous commentor, I don't think Jack is immoral. I don't think he deliberately does something that would hurt another or just doesn't care. I think he is more Amoral. It just does not occur to him that something he's doing with someone is something he shouldn't do. Look at how he's handleing Debbie. Patience and tenderness itself. He's thoughtful of her past experiences, but I think only because he's been Told about it. Not that he would have observed and thought about it on his own. I believe he just did not think the Beth situation was that serious and at the moment Debbie was vulnerable and needed his attention. He could have been more discreet about it. I wonder if he's ever going to try to do Cathy's mother-in-law? That would be a challenge. I think it is pretty much a given that he'll soon be doing Beth and that Debbie and Karen will probably be ok with it. I think he Does tend to think his Pecker will solve any and all problems with the opposite sex and earn the admiration of all males. Of course, he is probably a huge screwup on two legs, but wants to do better and I think by the end of this saga he'll probably be an adult. I like this very much.
There aren't enough "banging my best friend's girl" stories. Hot.
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Anonymous11/23/15
duh
Jack here is well and truly Fucked. And so is Karen, Debbie, and Cathy. Beth is sure to soon offer Jacko her virginity and join his harem. Poor guy. I tried handling three women at the same time. Not at the SAME same time but you know what I mean and it nearly killed me. And so did they. I see there are a lot of chapters here, I wonder if we have already been introduced to the women that Jack will eventually fuck or are there more to come?
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Anonymous01/13/17
Awful writing and lousy plot. Very disappointing from a normally talented writer.
English
Sounds
Your women don't make any sounds. Maybe an Ahh, Ohh or Urgh here or there would help.
I agree with the below comment...
... about sounds. Seriously, it's a nice story but the women are acting like they are just warm bodies to fuck. I keep feeling like the character is using them to get his rocks off, and is not giving any pleasure in return. I remember only one time that you have mentioned that one of the girls have actually got off.
While a major point for me, that is the only concern that I have with a good story, with an interesting storyline. I can't wait to see where you go with this.
boom
Dude I cant get away from the story!!! excellent story!! this should be a BOOK!! haha.. i've never gotten past the porn in the past... this one i just want to read the story and find out what happens next!
Domination with a twist of compassion
M&S can be either a major theme or a background effect - Jack is obviously a dominator with enough compassion to keep the story from slipping into debauchery - a good combination of selfish passion from both Jack and Karen with a willing partner characterisation by passive Debbie - the stories in Literotica have a wide spectrum of themes and CvsN is just one example of a story a bit left of central
This is so uplifting to read as I convalesce !
Right now I'm doing physical therapy, playing online chess and meandering through this story in no particular order. Your stories uplift my spirits. Thanks! Now for a little yoga and tidying up , then back to see how chapter 4 shakes out.
As usual TX well done. About to start reading chapter 4 hoping it is a good as the last three.
Unsympathetic protagonist
Congrats you've created a main character that is basically one giant testicle. Does this ass clown do anything non selfish? C'mon you're a better writer than this. The seesawing between his immoral actions and his syrupy words are stupid.
skull-nation23
I was a hero. I was a villain. I was a jerk. I was a fool. I was a genius. I was a male, letting his hormones run his life. I was a typical guy, letting the little head do all the thinking. " words to describe my life sadly i agree with the first comment but i must admit....im still intune so good work.
ANONYMOUS NUMBNUTS
nuff said
congratulations
Unlike a previous commentor, I don't think Jack is immoral. I don't think he deliberately does something that would hurt another or just doesn't care. I think he is more Amoral. It just does not occur to him that something he's doing with someone is something he shouldn't do. Look at how he's handleing Debbie. Patience and tenderness itself. He's thoughtful of her past experiences, but I think only because he's been Told about it. Not that he would have observed and thought about it on his own. I believe he just did not think the Beth situation was that serious and at the moment Debbie was vulnerable and needed his attention. He could have been more discreet about it. I wonder if he's ever going to try to do Cathy's mother-in-law? That would be a challenge. I think it is pretty much a given that he'll soon be doing Beth and that Debbie and Karen will probably be ok with it. I think he Does tend to think his Pecker will solve any and all problems with the opposite sex and earn the admiration of all males. Of course, he is probably a huge screwup on two legs, but wants to do better and I think by the end of this saga he'll probably be an adult. I like this very much.
5 stars
There aren't enough "banging my best friend's girl" stories. Hot.
duh
Jack here is well and truly Fucked. And so is Karen, Debbie, and Cathy. Beth is sure to soon offer Jacko her virginity and join his harem. Poor guy. I tried handling three women at the same time. Not at the SAME same time but you know what I mean and it nearly killed me. And so did they. I see there are a lot of chapters here, I wonder if we have already been introduced to the women that Jack will eventually fuck or are there more to come?
Awful writing and lousy plot. Very disappointing from a normally talented writer.
Sleeping with the best friend's wife?? C'mon man.
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