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hell yes!
Now that's good fucking poetry. The type of which we need more.
bedazzle me with vehemence.
yes.
Careful !!!!!
Be careful for what you ask;
be careful in where you ask it;
lest you step out your door
and find a line 4 blocks long;
I'll be at its head, ready
for you to wear me out.
Excellent work!
Now this is what I call EROTIC poetry! Hell JC this is an erotic masterpiece! You have blown me away with this one!
You keep them coming girl and we'll all keep loving them!
Disagree
I disagree with LeBroz' s comment - He would be BEHIND me in the queue.
Please, Jennifer, can I fulfil you need? Just call and I'll be there!
Brilliant poem. Brillant sentiment. Had me wanting you all the time I was reading it.
Hm
The repetition flows with it nicely. Not my usual taste, but well done.
~
I love how this starts out with mental complexity. Using big words such as Eradicate and vehemence. The first stanzas come from the mind the head...then work down and out. From the body down to basic primal needs. You touch on so many things.. power, and manipulation..frustration. Working through life to the simple.. a call for completion. Nice work Jen keep going
du~
Scorcher Gurl ~~!!!!
Wowza Jenn.
You hit tha nail on tha head gurl.
Very Hott poem here. You started slow,
and ended in flames. Erotica that Scorches ~!!
Keep'm Cummin My Friend ~ *grins*
mention
your poem has been mentioned in the thread
"New Poems Reviews"
thanks for the journey~
el..
this will indeed keep ones dance card filled...winks...blue
oh
hell yes.
this is a fine
firey
display
of exactly
the way i feel.
great stuff.
Whoa
Come on, tell us what you really want.
suggestion
I call for a lover
to eradicate my wants,
gratify my needs
and bedazzle me with vehemence.
Send me perfection personified
to cover me in stimulation
and smother me in sex.
Strip my deprived body bare.
Shed me of unnecessary layers
and burrow beneath my skin.
Exploit my nakedness
and abuse my mind.
Ravish me with power.
Straddle me in strength
and harness my frustration.
Take me.
Own me.
Satisfy my every craving.
Leave me with no mistake
that you were here.
I call for this
I call for a lover
I call for you.
High and inside....
everyone is giving you a strike, but I thought it needed
a bit more mystery. I did like the way you laid 'I Call
For A Lover' out, but I saw nothing new or different. A nice
4. sand
Thank you
to all who have commented ~
sand ~ thanks for your honesty
it's appreciated, i'm still learning.
Thanks for the suggestion ~ I actually
really like the rewrite!
many thanks to you all
~ Jenn
Works for Me...
(Gentle Smile)... you have my Attention (Again) Pretty Lady...
NW Wolf...
You Called?
I agree with Du and Syndra Lynn. Like Du, I liked how you started with the mind and worked down the core of it. I am confused about you liking anonymous' rewrite. The rewrite seemed like your original poem except for leaving out some of the good stuff. For instance anonymous leaves 'fuck me' out of the poem in the rewrite. That is like ripping the guts out of the poem.
ty,bd
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