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Curious
It's a little short but I am curious to see how this turns out.
never read your work
before. you've got my attention. already downloaded your other stories, going to do some reading. hope the quality is the same. looking forward to this one's next chapter. hope you don't keep us waiting long.
Well Now - The Wind Blows From Another Direction
and it is good of you to try different things - especially marital consequence from a womans viewpoint - onword please and hopefully credibly as well!
YES YES YES....Chapter 2!!!
Gripping piece.......Great plot and character portrayal for such a short submission. Lots and Lots of questions unanswered......answer them for us....PLEASE!
What are you doing!!!!!!??
For Christ sake any husband would be totally exstatic if he came upon a tape of his demur little woman with DD tits getting anal-ized by a complete stranger. Most wives are too nicey nicey in the bedroom.
Just kidding. I like your story but I love your other stories more. Don't let the whining whimpering guilt-ridden complainers get you too far from your best stuff.
Wither Goest Thou?
As usual your writing style is outstanding, There are so many possible ways that chap. 2 can go that I will look each day to see if you've written it (I hope) and where it's going. Thank You. Ronnie W.
PLease tell me there is a part 2
Now pwersonally I like it when an author experiments.
It might not be their BEST work but it can bring a new twist or new perspective to a Cat.
Now I really liked the set up in this one. Clean writing and a nice tight plot. Standard holes, hell what wife woudl be stupid enough to, well, Cheat AND keep the tape. But that is the Catigory.
Can't have a western with out a showdown ya know.
now the KEY for me is IF there is a part 2, please, please, please; and how GA handles it.
Will they get back together? Can she explain? Can he forgive? Can she repair the wounds that she gave him?
OR do they split? I don't think this is a revenge story. More of the emotional 'kick to the nads' story that I personally like.
Lots of drama ahead, and GA will not let me down I know it.
Great start to the story
Don't let the last idiot tell you different. Take this story where ever you want to go. Personally I feel you should keep to your original intentions. You write various themes and you should keep to what you like best. We all know that no matter what kind of stories you write someone will always disagreee. My personal preference is to see the bitch hung out to dry and for her husband to move on after a quick bit of revenge. I know that my veiw point does not seem to among the most popular at this site but I will never understand how any man can watch his wife have sex with another man. Everyone has a write to do what they want in there marriage and if both parties agree then more power to the couple I hope they are happy. If I ever found out if my wife was having an affair, I would be gone in a second. Back to story I hope you write to make yourself happy and no matter what you do write it should be for your pleasure and no one else's.
I like your style of writing, even though I don't always like a particular story, but personally I just feel that your stories are not always long enough and you do not give a more complete backround that could enhance the story so we get a better overall picture of what you portrait especially how the charactes are making there decisions. For example take this story after setting up how the husband finds out about the tape, you could of flashed back and told a story in a story about him coming back after the trip including alal his feelings about how she tried something new and obviously how he was suprised by this. This would have added length but also background for us to see why he felt like he did. It really is not needed but it I feel it could only enhance the story.
Update on last comment
Between writing my comment and posting it 2 other Reviewers made comments. My opening remark was address to the last Anonymous comment before mine.
I have read Doctor Wyldcard and Ronnie Wachuka work and I think both of them write very good stories.
too short
That's become a damn trend here. If we ate this way, we'd starve to death.
Also, "maybe if she acted quickly enough she'd be able to salvage their marriage." The boat sailed on acting quickly 4 years ago. All she's going to do is get in his face when he said he needed space.
Is there a difference...?
Is there a difference:
She HAD an affair.
She is HAVING an affair.
Would they make a difference to the husband that finds out about the affair whether she was activly screwing around compared to she HAD screwed around sometime in the past??
If there is reason to believe that the affair was short, and definitely over with, I think the couple could get past it.
Will she be able to get him to believe her love at this point in the story? I doubt he'll be receptive.
One point- WHY was the tape made in the first place and WHO was the cameraman?
It will be inte4resting to see how this story plays out. A very good start, though.
Great
Please more chapters of YOUR story.
Great start
I know how well you write already...but you have got another winner on the go here....don't stop...don't stop
Ole Reb
Nice Premise
Wife cheated but it was briefly while he was gone and then stopped. Five years have passed. She's been faithful since then. She loves him and is great in bed. Lot's of ways to go.
A bigger question is: "Does he want a wife who is an absolute idiot?" Of course there is no story if she doesn't keep the tape but hey, that's got to be the ultimate stupid.
Keep Going!!!
Atta gal - I see another home run!
Good Start
This one looks like it is off to a good start especially if you finish like you said you were going to. Thanks for what I hope will be a good read.
Don't bother
Another wimp story end the making. Kill it now.
great start
great start. pls continue.
Nice variation on a theme
I'm enjoying this one. It's got a different slant - and that's pretty difficult in this genre.
I don't hold to the "Once a cheater, always a cheater" point of view. I WILL accept "twice a cheater, always a cheater", but sometimes there are extenuating circumstances - bad time in the marriage, husband away for an extended time, drunk and stupid: something like that.
And sometimes the one-time cheater realizes that it wasn't all that it was cracked up to be, certainly not worth further risk to the marriage.
This is apparanently one of those times. Five years have passed since the 'event'. That's a good indicator that whatever had caused her to cheat was in the past and that she was going straight.
Of course, holding on to the tape wasn't the smartest thing anyone has ever done in a Literotica story. But then again, most of these stories require the perpetrator to do something pretty stupid, otherwise they might never get caught. Then what kind of story would you have?
Great story
This happened a long time ago.So far her husband has found a tape of her fucking five years before. He should see if the affair is continuing and go from there. If he loves her and believes in her and that she is NOT still looking for Mr. Goodbar, then he needs to forgive her and thank the Gods and her lover that he is the lucky recipient of her giving her ass to him at will. Some husbands don't get that indulgence in the course of a lifetime of wedded bliss.
He will really be a lucky stiff after she has children and her pussy is forever fucked up by the birthing process. lol
Really good writing and an excellent story line G/A. Please continue.
I, for one, like it
Please keep up your fine work. Don't listen to all the nay-sayers who whine about 'wimp husbands'. I think everyone reacts differently in situations like these, and it is interesting to examine these differences.
I don't enjoy the wimp type stories at all. But then I haven't seen you write a bunch of them either. Keep on with this story please.
A good start
I really am enjoying the story so far. There is one thing I wish to question: Did the husband make a copy of the video? I hope he did, and it was the copy that was playing for the wife. That tape is proof of her adultery, and would make a nice piece of evidence for a divorce. He should also get tested for STD's. There really is no reason for him to stay married to her anymore. The trust is gone, and I doubt he wants to rebuild it. The best revenge would be for him to divorce her, and find a beautiful, wonderful, and faithful life. The icing would be if she saw them having a great life, and would have to live with the fact that she threw that life away. Of course a vindictive husband ( one getting back at her for taking everything in the divorce) could send copies of the video to her family, friends, and co-workers.
Hey
Good story is there a part 2 or ending?
Engaging story so far but............
I know you saw that comming, but.......
While personally I like to think that I'm not heartless, a lot of folks get upset with husbands from this section being seen as "Wimp's" because often the wife cheats and the husband does nothing but has to endure it and learn to get over it.
Sure the husbands get hurt or upset, but whats really the end result? He takes her back and lives happily ever after. Some how that never really happens in real life though. I'm not saying that every husband in these stories should have to leave their wives, but the scale should be evened out some how if you choose to make them stay together.
Personally to me thats what it boils down to, and I'd like to think that on the average most folks would agree with that. If the scales were balanced so that it didn't appear that another wimp husband was just getting screw over twice, once while the wife was cheating, then the second time after he finds out and the author decides to have him take the high road and just live with it, then folks would seem to like these stories more.
But either way its a VERY good start. If you can find a way for the scales in the husbands eyes (and most everyone else's) to be balanced out, then I think most folks who are against wimp husbands (myself included) would love the story even more.
Very good
One of your better stories. Straightforward, real and intense.
Good
This story definitely has a good start. Really, the only thing that took away from the story for me was the use of "......" If you work on your grammar and punctuation, it would be a good read.
And I don't see it being a "wimp husband". Being forgiving, and not forgetting doesn't make someone a wimp. A five month business trip would test anybody's relationship.
great start
great start, please continue. can't say i've enjoyed all your stories but i sure admire your willingness to write in all categories.
I'd like to see you continue this story.
I'd like to see you continue this story. I enjoyed it and I'd like to see where you might take your characters. You've written far more than I, so I'm somewhat reluctant to remind you not to let the "wimp haters" grind you down . . but I did it anyway!
Thanks,
cageytee
Good Start...
Good start for a story line. But I found the character development very weak. I don't know who Bradley really is. Why would he be gone for 5 months without returning home for a visit? And Suzie is even more of a weak character. I would like to understand more about her....etc.
Another possible writer error. You wrote "Suspicion warred with the trust..." Was 'warred' the word you wanted to use? I couldn't find it would fit the in the sentence that way. If I'm wrong, please let me know.
Maybe in the next section, you will embellish more of the character traits. I hope so.
good.....
Prefer this type of story to a 'wimp' story. Hope this one continues, soon....
Great Start
By all means continue! So far it is one of your best.
I do agree with an earlier commenter that a little background would be good. How did he happen to be away for 5-months? Who was the "other man", etc.
Hopefully your continuation will come soon.
Don't let her find him
Or, if she does, it's WAY too soon for him to kiss and make up, probably a normal man would put a foot in her ass. What about exposing him to STD's.....that's fucking deadly and a total disreguard for his life. I think he'd just ignore her at the door, or let her raise hell 'til management called the law on her. Spending the night in jail for disturbing the peace is only the beginning of what she truly deserves.
GREAT SO FAR
If i was the husband, i wouldn't take her back. Sure 5 months can be hard for anyone without there spouse, but he remained faithful and she didn't. Even worse she gave another man what she denied her husband for years(anal virginity). I as well hope that he made a copy of the video. If it were me i would divorce the whore and i would make her pay. For starters i would send a copy of the tape to everyone she knew. I would take my revenge on the bastard she fucked as well. Last thing i would do would go out and find me a younger,hotter woman than her. Like they say, the best revenge is living better evenmore so if its with someone else. A few days ago i read where someone said, that if you can't find it in your heart to forgive her than you never loved her. To the person that said that, let me say this. If the whore loved you she wouldn't of have cheated on you. Plain and simple. A one night stand might be forgivable. When she keeps going back, time after time it means that she dosen't love and respect you and that her marriage isn't important anymore.
Excellent So Far
I think everything in this story so far is great. Where do you go from here? Hopefully the couple will work out this problem and the story will work it out for them with as tight writing as this installment.
I am one of the people who like revenge stories over wimp stories. To me the wimp stories just don't seem real. They just seem aberrant psychology. Lately I have been annoyed with the cold passion of revenge stories. Rage is just an abrasive emotion. It is ugly. I get tired of reading about characters who are hard-hearted, hard-headed.
What you have is a very dramatic situation. Can you close this story in a believable way, have the characters listen to each other and understand each other's feelings----and without an excess of talk and re-hash.? It is tough. Good luck in working the details out. I'll be looking to see if you can pull it off. The story is the thing.
playingcardcompany
Good start, and really needs a sequel or two
I'd have prefered a bit more interaction between the husband and wife before ending this story. So far it reads more like a transcript of a divorce hearing, just touching on the emotions of the husband, and of the wife. Guess I'm saying that it needs more depth to bring the story to life.
Ditto!
I agree with Fregen-- why would wife keep incriminating tape of her adultery for five years --or for five minutes! seems incredibly stupid . otherwise, nice story start. the Ct. Yankee
coment on cheater
story is great needs to continue
Sick
This is just an example of our sick society where one partner is somehow the love slave of another partner over some man-made dogmatic rule that was not created by God.
To the Ditto Reviewer
in case you forgot: she said she meant to keep such a tape to watch it (again reminiscing old time with chucky and/or whoever else --- likely more tapes out there?) but just totally forgot to, once the loving hubby's back and being so much in love with him now, that's what the author alleged the wife said! very stupid but we each have a different or several, really, notions, of what "stupidity" is,,,
it's just a story
I intended to comment on the story but, after reading the comments, my comments are probably going to be more directed towards how the story seems to have affected previous readers.
I can't believe how many reviewers treat this story as if it really happened. It's just a story. I thought it was a good story. The writing was good. I'm not an english major or anything but I enjoyed reading it.
The other thing about a lot of the comments is how many men seemed to have taken personally the wife's act of cheating. "If it was me, I'd have left the bitch," seems to be a common theme. Hello, it's just a story. I once came across something my wife wrote in her journal. It was a story about how she once met a man in a club in Montreal and ended up sucking him off in the back of the club. After reading it, I was extremely upset and angry. She actually did live in Montreal for about 6 months and, though we weren't technically going out with each other, we were still seeing each other during that time. Whether the act actually happened or not, I felt betrayed that she felt the need to write about it. The odd thing about that event, though, is that I became extremely aroused and we ended up having a really good fuck session. Same thing with this story. The description of the woman being eaten, fucked, and buggered was for me the more exciting part of the story. It's why I read stories on this web site, to get aroused.
Good story!
Well written on a powder keg subject,,
I haven't left many public comments ove the past months, but I couldn't let this well written piece of literotica go pass with a comment. The tape of her giving a stranger her ass hole, something she had denied him, took away something he thoughtwas his. Bradley, did the best thing possible, get up out that house and go somewhere and think it out. The problem was, he didn't go to far away. Why couldn't he had gone 40 miles away so that her posibilities of locating his was lower. Then he could really think it though, before he took any drastic action. I know this is fantasy, but you hope some like this can happen for a great ending. Goldeniangel you being one of the better authors,will find away to give us a credible ending.
Well written on a powder keg subject,,
I haven't left many public comments ove the past months, but I couldn't let this well written piece of literotica go pass with a comment. The tape of her giving a stranger her ass hole, something she had denied him, took away something he thoughtwas his. Bradley, did the best thing possible, get up out that house and go somewhere and think it out. The problem was, he didn't go to far away. Why couldn't he had gone 40 miles away so that her posibilities of locating his was lower. Then he could really think it though, before he took any drastic action. I know this is fantasy, but you hope some like this can happen for a great ending. Goldeniangel you being one of the better authors,will find away to give us a credible ending.
Great
This is truly a great story.. I look forward to more.
Great story that needs a proper ending!
This is a gripping tale that deserves to be finished in a proper and revengeful way. Your work is always fantasic and look forward to your diverse array of stories. Please finish this one as it can only be done with your style.
Another Pretend Non Wimp Husband in the making?
My nose tells me that this is a PNWH in the making. In other words, one type of formula within the cheating wives genre, according to which a Pretend – Non - Wimp - Husband gives some feeble show of very mild dissatisfaction with wife’s betrayal. Than, after some brief but transparent maneuvers, he nestles himself safely back in wife’s bosom. I will be happy to be proven wrong of course, but the muffled tones of his note to his wife make me think that it actually is a PNWH story in the making.
what about her lover
what did hubby do to wife lover.
All your stories end before they are over....
Every story I've read you haven't finished...you just leave
them there hanging...
she deserves another chance with restrictions
I think she should get another chance but with restrictions
if she had told him and promised not to do it again .
Pat.
Atlanta,Ga
times up for cheating wife
I think he should dump her .
Atlanta,Ga
Good Story
The story is good. It does leave an opening for a follow up.
Closure to the story would be nice.
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