by DiaperedSiouxsie
this is a good story,but make several chapters to it though.
you are superb. this story made me wet and horny. a great story, gets right down to business, yet is still very well paced.
THIS is how you write a direct, concise story and not make it sound like it was rushed out before the author finished him/herself off. It had real solid writing behind it, the pace was appropriate, the language was a firecracker.
I enjoyed the story, short enough to enjoy during a quick break yet detailed enough to be enjoyable.
Feel free to develop the characters and add more chapters