All Comments on 'Forced in the Forest'

You wrote that it was her boyfriend, then later said that she wondered what TM stood for......Doesn't make sense.

Good first story. The writer's passion for the subject is evident. A few inconsistencies stall the story's flow. One paragraph, everything is in the forest, then "TM" leaves a cabin? His hood was removed twice and once removed...was it her boyfriend or a stanger "TM"? Some choppiness in sentence structure too. All those short sentences could be better linked with more imaginative writing, which I think the writer already has in her. I'll be looking for your next. dsow

following the lines of the Wait...what comment... Her boyfriend's name is Ian, where do you get a T out of that. To address the comment wait...what, she doesn't wonder what TM stands for but what he has in store for her, from what I read. This story is good, but too short, and it does have that one who is this person, issue to deal with, to confuse the audience is to belittle your own peice of work. in my humble opinions.

Hungry for a drive to the Forest due to your hot story.

Zulu

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I'll be honest, I was getting a bit hot and bothered and I was really liking the story and then....well....I just became bothered.... Who the heck is TM? Ian was the captor.... or did something happen in editing....? Fix and repost would be my suggestion, because it was good.... but then it just got confusing.

Peace,

~A Fan